Without you I see myself nowhere on the earth
Without you I fail to feel the beats of my soul
I cannot tell anything
Still my eyes says to you all
And you know very well your company makes me whole.
That is why I hate loving you.
I hate loving you as you leave nothing of me for myself
I hate you for compelling me to love you more than myself.
I hate the way you have captured my heart
And I hate the fact that without you I can't even think of a new start.
Without you beside me
I cannot feel free
Even under the ravishing sky
That is why I tie
My soul with yours.
Still let me try
To hate you and make myself cry.
A contest entry
- I hate loving you! ( PLEASE ADD A ! TO YOUR TITLE) by badddgirl.
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Great
You have some powerful words here. They are very meaningful in the way you have written this poem.
~Best Wishes~ -
It sounds like you need a good dose of love for yourself here...not the Narcissistic kind, but more self-respect.
The love described in this poem seems self-destructive ...and the person loved is imprisoning the other, through selfish and egotistical manipulation.
Do you really love this person?, or are you seeking to be "filled up" by a love that isn't really there in the first place.
Love and respect yourself first, then other's will...
I know the trap of the love that you describe for I have fallen victim to it many times in my life, mainly due to my own insecurities.
Good luck with this "love" and in the contest! The poem is very well written with intense feeling...
Two of my favorite parts were;
"I hate loving you as you leave nothing of me for myself
I hate you for compelling me to love you more than myself.",
and the end;
"Still let me try
To hate you and make myself cry."
It makes me see the futility that you feel.
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OoOoOoOoO Your poem reminds me discussions of WUTHERING HEIGHTS!!!!!
It's Deep, Very Very Deep.
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Very deep
I love it!
I hate loving you as you leave nothing of me for myself
I hate you for compelling me to love you more than myself.
This is so real to me.
Good luck and thank you! -
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Thanks a lot for reading and commenting.
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