BROTHERS"
Brothers are supposed to stick together
I've always heard blood is thicker than water
Fuck i'd still do life for my brother
But the punk is afraid of our step father
The same man who has made his life better
The same man who pulled us all out of the gutter
But none of this shit realy matters
Because my brother is'nt a true rider
He'll stand in front of a jury and point his finger
Really i could look past all that
But not when i'm disrespected for some lame crap
3 years in prison is'nt far from enough
I cant force him to visit he say's tough
For some reason i will always remember this
Regardless my love for my brother is faultless
The things i would do for him are endless
O well everyone makes mistakes
Mine was expecting him to do something he would'nt
His was thinking i was fake
Hay he might not have been told so,does'nt remember
Brothers are soppsed to stick together
For me blood is and always will be thicker then water.
Jordon i wrote this because it was a way to vent
I put myself in prison,so none of this should really matter
love you baby bro
A contest entry
- I Don't Know by Pollycheck.
450 points, ended April 29, 2007, 137 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best of the Best by Sapphire Rose.
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Comments
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Using the language of the real people in this world is awesome, and you did great with that.
Some typos that are easily fixed though. It should be "really" instead of "realy". And "supposed" instead of "soppsed". As well as "Hey" instead of "Hay" like a horse eats. And then with your conjunctions it should be "n't" not "'nt". Nothing too major, unlike with some other entries I've read. A touching read to a brother. Nicely done, all in all.
Sweetest of dreams! ~D -
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. This is a very special poem for a special brother. There are several typos in this poem and most would be caught if you did a spell check on it.
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