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Bribe





Late afternoon bribes me
with scents of honeysuckle.

 

     Whispers whimper whimsically

     through silky spikes

     and fulgent foliage.

 

Yet time

doesn't love day games enough

to lecture me lies.

 

Summer serenades

- of birds and bugs -

implicate the impregnation

of night.

 

     Patiently,

     I wait...

 

And then,

dusk cracks open.

 

 

 

 

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  • Dobar Dan
    February 7, 2008

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    Returning the favor

    Very well written - easy read with great poetry although rhyme is absent - I am a rhymer - all in all nice - keep on keeping in - Bless God - Joe


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    December 4, 2007

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    I like this it is really good. HAs great alliteration to Good luck with it in the contest.

  • Bad Bill
    December 4, 2007

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    Beautifully done--great alliteration and lovely word-choices. An excellent piece and a delight to read.

    Bill


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    November 23, 2007

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    Oh how I love the word foliage... I should use that word more often too. You definately have a way with alliteration and of course expressing the beauty of summer and splendor - intense.


  • Kadyia
    November 9, 2007

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    You have great vocabulary. It creates a wonderful image in my mind. Its a different way to look at things.


  • lindaburns gold member
    October 20, 2007

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    Thank you for entering my contest. I had to find “fulgent” on dictionary.com but that’s not your fault. I like your poem even though I don’t fully understand it.


    • leander Moderators member
      October 20, 2007
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      Well, to say it in none metaphorical ways, it's the description of day turning into night

      I hear a lot from people that the metaphors I write are too difficult - lol, so that's in fact my fault

      Thank you for the comment - best of luck judging

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    September 3, 2007

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    I love your images, they are crisp and clean and leave me wanting more. It is nice to see you around again Lee, I have missed you.


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    April 30, 2007

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    Late afternoon bribes me
    with scents of honeysuckle.

    THIS STANZA full of a golden color of aroma, the day shimmers promises.

    Whispers whimper whimsically
    through silky spikes
    and fulgent foliage.

    THIS STANZA is a texture of moving life, of purple liquid solid things in oneness with one another and the viewing eyes.

    The day is a seduction and enticement of what might follow in the night, yet the night has its own beguin and ending.....


    Patiently,
    I wait...

    And then,
    dusk cracks open

    SO THE DAY begin again, and the circle of a life, yours, its wonder aat the simple elegance and promise of things gives birth to itself.

    in the end, there is no way out.... this endless cycle of wonder and enticement, and utter disappointment as well.

    honored.... ,,,,Danni ;)

  • mauliz
    April 28, 2007
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    Love the imagery in this. I can almost feel the afternoon. Nice one!


  • Celticmoon
    April 25, 2007

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    Lee,

    Where you come up with the writes that you do is beyond me. The beauty you pen is astounding and leaves me breathless and sighing. I so love the flow of your pen and it's golden strands of silk as you lay them forth in such sweetness as this.




    Love
    Bel


  • Pain Angel
    April 23, 2007
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    i like how u write... it5 "i~N~t~E~r~E~5~t~I~n~G" lol

    Gay Pride,
    *Yetta* B^


  • Burmina
    April 21, 2007

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    Good lord, you are amazing. There isn't much that I can say that hasn't already been said in these few great comments.

    Just well done, as always...
    Burmina

  • PalmettoSky
    April 19, 2007

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    very good writing! This is what poetry is supposed to be! Great job fellow poet. Keep these awesome writings coming. I liked it very much. Peace and light always in all ways, Kendal


  • Allisaurous
    April 18, 2007

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    wow you have an amazing way with alliteration. this was so aazing you are great at painting a picture in my mind.


  • x CheepPurfume
    April 18, 2007

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    Oh wow Leander. I don't know how you do it. Really I have no clue. CAUSE YOU'VE DONE IT AGAIN. Beautiful written, and I can't say that enough, like usual. My comments are prolly getting boring, because I don't know what else to say about how great I think your work is. and to think, if it wasn't for you or I writing, we prolly would have never met in the first place..so I thank this write now. AWESOME AWESOME JOB LOVELY.



    Tori


  • Mari Goes gold member
    April 18, 2007

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    Now there is no doubts
    The images are solids yet presented with poetic tune. You made of a simple picture a coloured painting. The end is perfect! We might have expected a sun light there, and then you came with dusk. Excellent poem!


  • poetryality silver member
    April 17, 2007

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    You make me sigh Lee. This is a beauty! It dances with a sense of Springtime. I love the last line! It breaks my sense into a realism that was most unexpected. Great imagery and in no wise verbose. Very well penned in a precise style. I got an awful lot of the display of nature in its brilliance from these words. Exquisite! I wish you well in this BONUS Round!


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • Hadji Murad
    April 16, 2007

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    Gawd, this is nice. The imagery is so serene and vivid and delicately lovely and yet it's so seemingly morbid and macabre at the end. It's gorgeous and the transition is so subtle. This really seems like it's about the delicacy and yet beauty of life, but the brevity of it. The brevity of this poem is astounding and I love this so much.


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    April 16, 2007

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    Very nice. I haven't read such a vivid description in a long time. I love the way you can pack so much imagery into so few words.


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 16, 2007

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    You are SO good at writing about nature - wonderful, metaphorical piece of writing, my friend. I'm on my way to a meeting and then off to my mother's birthday party, but I could not resist stopping here to read your new poem.

    You definately are a veteran when it comes to nature poetry. Loved the title and the concept of bribery here - as always your use of poetic devices are outstanding!! Loved this one.

    ~ Nicolette

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