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Hollow Bones

Hollow bones
In the air so light.
I look longingly upon them.
Heavy bones
Keeping me here.

A contest entry

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  • Delicate Jaded
    May 2, 2007
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    Heh thanks Aled.
    It's been a long while since I wrote something.
    I've been reading over my past poems. A strange girl I am..or was..or still am? I dunno! Ta anyway.


  • Osarkon
    April 18, 2007

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    Here's a small surprise, I choose to sign in here and you've uploaded something! This is really different to your past writes Sam, and while it's full of evident meaning, it seems to jar a bit when I read it. Critical comments on your birthday, hell i'm such a bad person. But I now see it's a contest entry so in that context it' s a great interpretation of the photo and completely apt.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 16, 2007

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    Very good interpretation of the photo. I like the density of the wording in this. A very intriguing write.
    Thank you for sharing.
    Gaylene