How many passions gild the lapses of mind
How many new streams do I find
Entering this endless blue ocean of mine
Consecrating it with their shine
Bringing new birds to sport in this barren tree
And cultivate the fruit in me
How many desires gild the lapses of mind
How many times they be the wind
When I falter to heaven`s mighty gale
And to make me soar higher than ever
Although often they are wrong and they fail
But the gilded glee gleans forever
Life without this lucent lean is not worth living
The taker only takes without giving.
In a list
A contest entry
- "I look into your hazel eyes, gold brown flecked with blue." by Shadow-Phoenix.
450 points, ended May 21, 2007, 6 entries
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A very nice adaptation of "How many bards gild the lapses of time!" by John Keats. I do like how you've spun your own tale about it, lovely job.
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Yes this is just plain wonderful. I belive that your words are vert artistic.
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There is so much beautiful, expressive imagery in your poem, which I love. I'm not sure that it fits the prase too well, but this is an excellent poem.
I'm sorry for the lateness of commenting, but my Internet broke for a long time, and I have no other way of 'net access.
I really like both your title, the line "How many desires/passions gild the lapses of mind." Something about it just makes me go !!! when I see it, and start to think. It's a very, very good line!
Thank you for entering my contest.
~ Shadow-Phoenix.
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Beautiful images, rhyme & rhythm, although I'm afraid I don't see how it relates too well to the phrase for Shadow-Phoenix's contest. Of course that may be just my opinion. Thanks a bunch for entering anyhow.
DancingRed.
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This is nice! I really like the repetition on the first line of both stanzas. The rhyming scheme is very interesrting too.
How many new streams do I find
Entering this endless blue ocean of mine
Consecrating it with their shine
^^I love those lines! Beautiful work! Thanks for entering!
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