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You

You said that you always be there for me
You said you would always care
You said that you would never leave me
You lied to me
And now i am dead
How could you do this to me
I trusted you
And you betrayed me
I hate you
Go to hell
Die do something
Don't look at me like that
You left me here with dad
And you expected me to be nice
Boy dad was write you are stupid
And he had every reason to beat on you
I loved watching you bleed
And i love hearing you scream
And then he finally kills you
And my last words are
Bye bye mommy
I hope you know I hated you so

INSPIRED BY TIMOTHY JAMES GRIZBE
AND TOMAS JAMES GRIZBE

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  • RazorbladeKiss14
    September 12

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    Oh my this was a very intense poem, I hope this never really happened to you, I love it, it was dark and very sad I love it!! Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering!!!

  • goalsv
    April 29, 2007

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    I had read that before, but for some reason didn't comment. Your emotion is felt here, but the bond between a mother and child goes deep!


  • SilverRose2007
    April 20, 2007

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    Dear sister dianna
    I dont think timathy whould ever say this to you or maybe he would being he lives with he ass whole of a dad one day i hope to have a few choise words with tomas and get your son back to you i hope some day i can meet your son and help the both of you at once if timathy says anything like this to you which i dont think he would just think that tomas is saying them which really dont help much he shouldnt be saying them either.

    you are a great poet and a great friend and a great sister to me keep on writing and have fun i will always be here for you and someday timathy will to love your sister ashley also knowned as silverrose


  • jacbgd2 gold member
    April 16, 2007

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    powerful

    very sad poem but it speaks of something that is happening all around us far too often.. Many children watch as parents are beaten and they can not do anything to help... The minor errors in the poem, I feel gives character to the poem since this poem is about a family functioning in-error......  the really sad part is many times the kids think,many times, it is their fault.....  Good write.