Tonight I am as sober as I am innocent.
As I take another swig in my rapid descent.
Like my out of control car I am more dangerous then ever
We've already decided we are going down together.
The crowd is a blur, the cops sirens fade out
But they won't take us alive, without a doubt.
Skidding and sliding, my car starts to roll
That was my last chance to regain control.
We hit the pavement, plastic parts crunch like bones
The car rolls on its side, as the metal parts groan.
I crawl out of the car, bloody and bruised
I reach in, grab my gun, this situation isn't defused.
They say "Set it down, we just want to help you"
I scream back "What the fuck can you do?"
I feel the blood trickle into my eyes
As I lay on the pavement fighting the cries.
The pain is unbearable shooting out from my chest
I scream out your name, despite my bodies protest.
I see you start to emerge from the car
I guess we didn't think it would get this far.
I grab onto your hand, your blood mixing with mine.
I kiss your cheek our fingers intertwine.
I guess this is how we knew it would be.
No more to say but I love you, and you love me.
Then I shoot you and they shoot me.
Romeo and Juliet, against the LAPD.
Please tell me what you think
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most excellent
awesome imagery for an epic tale of love gon awry.
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LOL...and I could se it all play out on channel 11 morning news, with jillian barbarie and dorothy lucy talking over it. . that's the last time I watched a police chase in California. .unless the cars blow up in the chase, it's just another day in Los Angeles
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I absolutely loved this wonderful story. You've quite an imagination.
Bravo,
jin
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The satirical nature of this piece is a delight. a quick note: "wont" is a word with different meaning then is "won't" I could believe you live in a large city or watch lots of TV from how precisely this follows reality. good penning.
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Crud, I must have missed that when I read over it. Thanks...actually I dont live in a big city, and I rarely watch TV, this really was just thoroughly imagined. Thanks!
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beautiful poem I was hooked til the last word...just how I like my poems addictive tilthe end!
::huggs&kisses::
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WOW... This is a great piece of work. You brought the whole urban thing to it!
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lol
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Great
Very interesting. My faveorite part was:
I feel the blood trickle into my eyes
As I lay on the pavement fighting the cries.
The pain is unbearable shooting out from my chest
I scream out your name, despite my bodies protest.
I see you start to emerge from the car
I guess we didn't think it would get this far.
Such an intriguing way to say a dark thing. Great job and best of luck in your writing future. -
The title drew me in on this one and the poem entertained
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wow this was great..it captured me from the start..Great visuals...I loved the lines "We've already decided we are going down together" and "But they wont take us alive, without a doubt" Great job all around!!
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WOW..I love this...so full of imagination...the ending is wonderfully thought out...and a surprise...great work..thanks for sharing
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wow i love this.
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hahha thats awesome
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