"Find peace where you are," she said,
and I just blinked at her because
how could she understand the question so well,
but not the answer?
It's not like my youth,
when I could just pretend
with enough Jack Daniels
and different men.
It's easy to be at peace
when you've nothing to lose
and plenty of time on your hands;
the answers are more elusive, though,
when there's no "next year,"
and there's no one but me
to get myself to a better place
and a better time.
Please tell me what you think
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I like your way of writing. You shoot straight and call it like you see it. Your honesty is truly captivating
Love,
Stacy
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Thank you. That's quite a compliment! I rather like seeing myself that way but am afraid it only emerges in verse. Maybe I can work on that!
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Fantastic! I enjoy the fact that you do not muddle your poetry with unecessary words. There is such a simple beauty, no matter the content...though that is fantastic as well. You words to my heart...
"the answers are more elusive, though,
when there's no "next year,"
and there's no one but me
to get myself to a better place
and a better time." So very true. You have the Midas touch FaeRae!
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very well pend.. a very strong poem and the simplicity of words makes it more beautiful and touches
shd think of sum title soon..its a bit dificult to find one..your write touches very sensitive side and a strong veiw of a person..kida contrastic
well said that peace is easy to find whn u hav nothin to loose.. and i loved ur 3 and 4th line.. i could relate it to some how..
i really admire your choise of words and the subject u chose to write..its not tht easy to descibe such emtions but its more difficult to justify 1..
hope to c u around and thankis for comment on my poem
regards
abuyi
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re: Untitled
Thank you so much for your kind comments on my poem. Yes, you are correct; I need to think of a title for it soon. I always let my poetry just "come" to me; unfortunately, I have not been able to feel satisified with any title for this yet, and I do not want to force it. I'm glad you liked the poem, though. It was about something that I needed to say to someone who was continually harming me with unsoliciated advice. I did not want to hurt this person by actually saying something mean, so I put my thoughts in poetry, which worked just as well. I got those feelings off of my chest without anyone getting hurt - so it was worth the effort. Thanks again for taken the time to read and comment. Your kind words were deeply appreciated.
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i admire your choise of decison..u chooced a bttr path thn anger..well im not like tht..i dun kno wat wud i ahv done..lol
well choose a titl..i cant figuer it out n i can understnd its is diffcult to find one.. but title influences a lot to the poem..
thnaks for rating my commmnt
cya around
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You have a strong way with wording poetry adding a new dimention to them. My fav part would have to be:
How could she understand the question so well
But not the answer.
Its kind of like a guessing game where you have to find clues to get the answer.
The way you write is just phenominal, and powerful. Great job.
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re: "Untitled"
Wow - what an amazing compliment you have given me regarding my poetry. Thank you so much for taking the time to read & comment, but thanks also for liking them! I gues poems are a little bit like our children, aren't they? A true labour of love. And sometimes pain.
Thanks again - so much,
***Rae***
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Peace in a better place and time!
I believe I understand what you are saying here about cliche, pat or trite expressions. Only part I wasn't sure about was if this exchange took place on the internet. I started to write a poem about a saint who lived alone on an island the other day. Perhaps there is a touch of that in there ("easy to be at peace")
One thing I have found is that there are people who solely communicate in cliches and yet have the greatest sincerity. Others who solely communicate in cliches and haven't the foggiest idea what is being said but know it is the appropriate response in that situation. Thusly they avoid emotional or intuitive input by depending on the assigned meaning of an phrase. I guess what I am saying is that not everyone has the ability of exptession and if it is an internet environment it is difficult sometimes to judge.
That said your poem indicates you know enough of this person to understand them. I am afraid I contributed nothing to your elusive answers, but hope you find something in there to make this worth the read. all the best. Jadon
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good write. very well done. I love this.
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on "Untitled"
Thank you very much. I wasn't sure if this would work or not, but it seems to be getting a fair response. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment, it's much appreciated.
FaeRae
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wow, that's some powerful stuff... "find peace where you are"... yea, last year i would have laughed at any one that told me that, i think i've finally got it now, but then not so much... beautiful and heartfelt and genuine, like always... way to write!
I love it
Keep writing!
~ashira ladonai~
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on "Untitled"
Thanks! Yeah, it seems to me recently that all the people rolling out advice are those who either haven't been through hell or have been through hell and THINK they're doing great, but are really a total mess. The latter applies to the person who told me to "find peace where I am." I thought it was so funny at the time that this person should be giving advice, but it did make me think about why I couldn't find peace. Sorry, that was a long-winded thank you. I tend to do that.
***Rae***
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Heartfelt emotions spill onto this page, Fae....I can relate and so many cliches are thrown at "us" when going through our journeys! You are not alone however, plenty of peeps, including me, to be here for you and love ya for just being you! screwed up, fixed, whatever....
PS Give the pooch a smooch!
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on "Untitled"
Thanks so much for the awesome comments. I can tell by reading your profile that you know EXACTLY what I mean here. So many people tell you to just relax, or find peace, or blah, blah, blah. So full of suggestions, but will they extend a hand to help you? Ah, that's a different story alltogether, isn't it. Thanks for the offer to be here for me; it's funny how I've found so many friends here on AP who are always available for me to talk to or to help, or even just to vent. In my "real" world, my "friends" aren't quite as faithful. Maybe it's 'cause we're all poets here. We all have a story, most of us have had lots of pain or trauma, and being poets we feel things so much more deeply than "normal" folk. I also think that's why I've found so many wonderful people here who have bent backwards to help me out - they get me! Thanks again, you're just too cool.
***Rae***
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