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Bitter Nostalgia

When The past I think I buried
Returns to break my fitful sleep
I wonder why I tarried
And do my best not to weep

With love’s harsh burden pressing -
Weighing me down as I run
From memories distressing
Have the tears and heartache won?

They hit me like a hammer
Crushing brutally through my heart
The eyes that once made me stammer
The touch that still tears me apart

I’ve worked hard to harden this armored heart
And with a word you’ve returned me to the start

These hands once clean of blood and sin
Scarred through the years of havoc
Had forgotten her hair, her skin
Soft feelings returning to mock.

Why return to torment me?
After your merciful neglect
What joy in this can you see?
Tearing a man down for effect?

All the hardships of a rough life
Have not prepared me for this:
The brutally beautiful strife
Of love I now realize I missed

This pain that I once thought I could eclipse
Returns with a word from your soft sweet lips

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  • TwiztidMaggot
    August 3, 2007

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    this is pretty good. I don't really feel much anger tho... where is all the ANGER and HATE toward that ONE person who PISSED YOU OFF to NO EXTENT? on the other hand, congrats on your wins, and good luck in the other contests.

    Crimson


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 3, 2007

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    All the hardships of a rough life
    Have not prepared me for this:
    The brutally beautiful strife
    Of love I now realize I missed

    lost love is hard to really forget and it will eat at you all the time with just a word or two from their lips


  • AutumnsFlame
    August 3, 2007

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    How sad... the subject was cliche, but the poem wasn't. good job on that... Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • Lillian Rose
    July 25, 2007

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    This is a really good write. I feel like the emotion was screamed at me through the words, and the fow was just amazing. I think you broke the stanza's up perfectly. Thank you for entering this into my contest and best of luck to you!

    Casey


  • BillyClyde
    July 23, 2007
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    Excellent! Great rhyme and the emotion bleeds through!Thanks for entering, good luck!


  • Ilma
    July 21, 2007

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    Wonderful rhyme, and very well written, I loved it, the emotion in this was very powerful and the last two lines especially were great, best of luck

  • tigress3737
    July 19, 2007

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    I don't usually like rhyming poems but this one is truly exceptional and uses rhyming the way it should be. I love this whole poem it shows the pain beautifully and expresses the emotions impeccably. Great work!


  • Gone
    July 18, 2007

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    Thanks for entering... I will give a detailed review prior to announcing the results

    cheers
    James


  • Memoirs of a Girl
    July 17, 2007

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    Very nice. I know exactly how this feels! Great write and thank you for entering!
    ~Memoirs


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    July 15, 2007

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    Congrats..smiles

    I had to come and see the new gold...shimmer shimmer..

    This write is simply excellent..
    You deserve this win!!smiles

    These hands once clean of blood and sin
    Scarred through the years of havoc
    Had forgotten her hair, her skin
    Soft feelings returning to mock

    This stanza is so heartbreaking..a beautiful painful pen..
    Peace..
    ~A~


  • adarkling
    July 15, 2007

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    This is an absolutely fabulous poem. The structure is brilliant, I am a fan of rhyming, but the feel of it is very touching. It is exactly what I am looking for! Good luck and thank you!


  • PrincessOfFire
    May 1, 2007
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    What heartache you must of felt. You describe the pain so well. Thanks for sharing.
    Rose

  • OurxBeginning
    April 28, 2007

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    This is interesting and emotion filled. Your rhyming was done very well. I could feel all of this and the ending wraps it up. Thanks for entering and good luck. ~~


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    April 15, 2007
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    wow..

    this is simply incredible...so much raw emotion..
    beautiful write..
    bravo..
    Peace
    ~M~

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