What [doesn't] kill us
Makes us stronger
But ♥honey♥
I
am
drowning
Gasping in [this] -
this lack of control
for every time my body [answered] to one that was not ♥mine♥
for [every]time control caved in
for every+time I let you in
for [every]time that l♥ve
cheated
kidded
mocked innocence
every
[little]
piece
of my [old] self
closing
d
o
w
n
shutting
o
u
t
&&one by &&one
every [tiny] cell
is [giving] up
and is [giving] in
Baby I'm [not] 18
Baby I'm a thousand years old
I lived f♥rever before [that] day
And now
I'm so ready to go
expressions on ''love''
sick
twisted
bent into one [last] firey rage
I
gave
in
to [your] control
control I now so desparetly [[try]] to regain
control I ache for
I [breathe] for
[happily] fat
now every b♥ne of this cage
breathe in
breathe out
shows for when 'love' connected
in ways so [[physical]]
I could not even scream my way out
[[you]]
can't
use ♥me♥ anymore
hair short
curves lost
no longer your object of desire
Baby
control is no longer yours ♥
Author notes
Nothing new here, another poem about my abusive relationship, written for a contest. And also a little about control, in case you hadn't noticed. More about the regaining of control through Bulimia, tied together with the idea of loosing womanly curves to repel other men.
Please tell me what you think
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WOW
That is absoultey beautifullllllllllllllllllll...........
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A very powerful & passionate work.
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and I thought I was the only one to think in this way--wow!! I see it all so clearly
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this is amazing! keep it up xx
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This is amazing.
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wow this poem is very powerfl and a very good write
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awesome write, ive also been in abusive controlling situations and i know its really hard to stop abusing yourself after theyve left - please tc and keep writing - hugs beccie
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Sorry it took me a million years to comment.
I LOVE this poem.
I hope you're not in that relationship anymore
~Princess of Shadows~ -
i saw that you commented one of my poems so i thought i could return the favor...
i love this poem
i dont really know how to describe it other than its really deep and i could tell there is a lot of thought in this one
keep up the good writing <3
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This is really great... I love the way you set it up with the pauses and the breaks..
My favorite part has to be..
"[[you]]
can't
use ♥me♥ anymore
hair short
curves lost
no longer your object of desire
Baby"
Its amazing i love your works
<3 Mandi
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This is a great write hun, I know what it's like to love someone who abuses you, so I'd like to say well done for being strong.
Luff ya
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Awsome poem. It took me a few seconds to really get the feel of it. But it ended up being great. You have a gifted talent for writing out your emotions and I really admire it.
~:~Kaela~:~
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Beautiful.
Its so emotional and amazing.
Wow. I don't think I can really relate, except for saying I have an abusive relationship with my brother. Not from someone I love.
I envy your talent for writing out your emotions.
Again, beautiful. *nods*
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Wow... I liked the way at the beginning it was about being controlled & at the end it was about breaking free. The lines "[happily] fat/ now every b|ne of this cage/ breathe in/ breathe out/ shows for when 'love' connected/ in ways so [[physical]]/ I could not even scream my way out" are really good. The last three lines, also. I liked the end way more then the beginning. It took me while for me to get into the feel of the poem, but after that, it was very readable & the punctuation added to it.
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