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Pain!

PAIN! HORRIBLE PAIN!
Needles pricking, sticking
Flesh tearing, wearing
Floating in green liquid
SCREAMING IN PAIN!
Mask over face
Tubes still in place
Glass all around
Doctors going to town
Torturing
CAUSING ME PAIN!
Thrashing, crashing
Bones on fire
Burning, hurting
PAIN!
Thinking this Hell
Will end not well
Falling into dark
Prickling, trickling
I’m burning in Hell

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  • Trapped Under Glass
    March 24, 2008

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    Devious

    This was down right devious and I loved every word. It had a great flow and it was very easy to picture the scene you set. Keep up the great work!

    -Adam