The years have gone by so fast,
it seems like only yesterday I was in your arms,
for that split second,
you protected me from everything bad,
and then one day you let go.
I wish I could be in your arms,
just one last time,
I wasn't daddy's little girl,
I was grandpa's little girl,
until you were taken away from me.
I want this nightmare to be over,
I want to wake up,
and see your loving face,
you were my knight and shining armor,
you were my pawpaw.
That year I lost all innocence,
up until then,
nothing bad could ever happen,
only good things could.
Then the feeling of security and safety stopped,
when I woke up to what I hoped was a nightmare
because I knew you were gone,
no where to be found,
That's when I realized it was reality...
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option 2
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It's always very sad to lose someone that's standing so close to your heart, and you conveyed that feeling very well within the words of this poem here.
I wish you a lot of strength if this is written from your personal viewpoint.
Thank you for entering the contest!
Leande -
this is an awesome piece of writing. so much emotion and depth that I can feel while I am reading it. a very heartfelt write.
All the best
Hollow Eyes -
I liked it! i felt emotion,and the title went along great with the ending.This definitly gave me an insight on how upset you feel,and i admire that in a poet.Thank you for entering my contest!
-Athena -
amazing. purely and delicately amazing. there is no words to describe my experience with reading this. sensational
good luck in my contest -
Wow, an amazing connection and sadness to it. You could feel and see the idea and emotion you where expressing.
Great job! -
"for that split second," - I don't believe there'd be a comma at the end of this line, since the next line seems to be a continuance of this line.
"I wish I could be in your arms," - I don't believe there'd be a comma at the end of this line, since the next line seems to be a continuance of this line.
"you were my pawpaw." - if "pawpaw" is in reference to a father, or grandfather, the usual spelling of that would be "Papa".
"up until then," - I don't believe there'd be a comma at the end of this line since the next line seems to be a continuance of this line.
A nice poem that you have written here.
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This is very dear to me. I really like it. Good luck in the contest.
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Guilty
Nice heartfelt writing.
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Excellent poem Good Luck In the Contest Think its about the Grandparent Option Am I right
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yes its about the grandparent option
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I believe you need more word variety here, there are just too many 'I's'.
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this is really sad and i'm sorry
luckily i was too young to really remember any of my grand parents that well but i imagine it would have been one step down from losing both of my parents which i did in 1989 only 11 weeks apart
i'm sure thought that you have some wonderful memories of them and those you should hold close to your heart
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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nice poem written for a loved one
this is special to you I can feel -
Nicely said.
Thanks! -
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I'm sorry that this happened to you. I am also very close to my grandpa. This poem shined off a lot of emotion and sadness, and the feelings definitely poured out to me.
"Then the feeling of security and safety stopped,
when I woke up to what I hoped was a nightmare"
Ahmazing lines. Very strong && powerful. Love it=]
And how you ended this poem with "That's when I realized it was reality..." that was definitely a great way to wrap it up=]
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thats a pretty fukin awesome poem... my papaw died 2 years ago, so i know how you feel.... it sux missing them.... great write! trhx for entering and good luck
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missing a love one is always hard no matter what age
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Aww. This is sad but very nicely written. I havn't lost anyone near to me but i can imagine how it feels. I'm sorry. Good luck in my contest.
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Very beautifuly Written ( I am assuming that this is from a young person ) although we never know because PapPaw's are something special.
Thank you for entering the Contest
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Very Emotional
This poem is very in depth about loss, and losing your grandpa, I would say? I know how it feels to lose a loved one. "Then the feeling of security and safety stopped" - I relate to that in every day life, not only in these situations, so I love that you included this. You capture a very dreaful feeling here, and I appreciate the strong effort. Kudos!
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