I guess I can't seem to make you love me
But I guess I've already tried and failed
So many times, fogotten my lines
I guess I really should say goodbye to you
[You can't help it, the way you're loving me
Just remember how you felt when you first saw me
Remember how I looked from such a distance
It was love at first sight, but I'd never tell you that]
I can't help the way you always laugh
When I fall down on the beaten path...
When I am down, I see how you love me
And everything is oh, so lovely!
[I wouldn't dream of anyone else
I'd rather die all alone by myself
When I'm sad, I see how you love me
And everything, everything is oh so lovely
It's oh so lovely
Lovely, lovely, true love is oh so lovely]
[But why does it hurt me so when I try to say
What I should be telling you everyday?]
I wouldn't hurt you if you told me
I'd be too caught up in your eyes to ever hurt you
But always hurt me by turning away
Whenever I'm close enough to you to say
What you've been wanting to hear
Because you know what I'm about to say
[I know what you're about to say]
But you'll feel hurt if I change the topic
[Why do you hurt me like this?]
[I wouldn't hurt you if you told me not to]
I'd be too caught up in your eyes
[When I'm alone I see you]
'Cuz when I'm alone I see you, I see you
And everything is oh so lovely
[Everything is so lovely]
Everything is so lovely
[Everything is so lovely]
Everything is so lovely
[Everything]
Everything
[Everything is lovely, 'cuz I know you love me]
Everything is oh so lovely, because I know
Because I know you love me
[Everything is so lovely now
Because now I know, you love me]
I guess I can't seem to make you love me
[I guess you got that one wrong]
But I guess I've already tried and failed
[You tried but you didn't fail]
So many times, fogotten my lines
[The words you said were good enough]
But I can't break myself and say goodbye to you
[If only you knew how much pain you'd saved me]
It's lovely
[You're lovely]
(I see how you love me)
You love me
[You love me]
(And everything's oh so lovely)
I see just how much you love me
(And I've just got to tell you
That I love you the same)
I love you
[You love me]
You love me
[I love you]
(You love me and everything's oh so lovely)
You can't help it...
The way you're loving...me....
And I can't help it...
The way I'm loving...you....
[The way you're loving...me....]
Author notes
Still a duet, but no brackets is the male, [___] is female and (____) is both. This is a rewrite, most of the credit goes to the original author, Bryan-CarnelianHope.
A contest entry
- Write me something? by Bryan-CarnelianHope.
475 points, ended April 21, 2007, 15 entries
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Comments
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Beautiful, thank you for redoing my song! I really really enjoyed this


