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[ A [white] damp cotton blouse ]

A [white] damp cotton blouse
and silk [pink] pyjamas
waltzing in time;
swaying strawberries and cream
propelled in a knot around
the linen line.
And in a giggling gust the
zestful chimes
beckon the candy cane weave
free.

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  • leander Moderators member
    April 23, 2007

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    For an instant, I had the feeling I was dancing upon the syllables of your words. An excellent use of alliteration (my pet pieve) wielded together with beautiful images...
    great writer you are!

  • pruedence
    April 16, 2007

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    This gives one a great image to dream on...great word usage...and the flow is wonderful...love it...nicely done, thanks for sharing