Oh my love
I never learned swimming in my life
but it was you only who inspired me to swim
in the river of your breasts
and inspired me to swim until I reached
with the quality of the impeccability
it was you, not you,
I must say that it was your passion
what monopolized me towards the voyage of
your two lemonades
where I showed the aroma exactly
to mean the essence of this galaxy
let me recapitulate you today that
your breasts are amalgamated with candies sugar
I am thankful to you that you never act me to stop
while I lick all your melody
what you file in the breasts with you
I speak the truth that I like your breasts so much
because they were the stimuli behind when I exposed you
the first time with my words saying I love you
Oh my love...
Author notes
Prompt..
3 ....THANKS FOR THE LEMONADE
In a list
A contest entry
- Sensual Pic. Prompt (Adult) by nevadapoet.
500 points, ended October 23, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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a great write...perfect imagery and metaphors. A perfect entry for the contest.
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Wonderfully and 'richly' written.
Heh' ... the shape of the poem looks a little like a torso underneath the 'lemon breasts'.
Sol
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Wow!
You took this way outside it's box...and plucked it right from the tree...nice fruit you got there! Absolutely wonderful write.
I shake my tambourine to thank you for taking the time of raising your pen to my page, and sway in song to wish you the very best…..la lalalala la
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excellent
true flow of words that reveal a loving heart. congrats and best regards.
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I love it. It is so sweet and passionate. I can truly see the love you with hold for this person. They are lucky to have you. Well done.
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How very creative of you to turn breasts into so much beauty and love and appreciation All great emotions
I loved it.
Thank you and Good luck
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Good job - nice imagery used.best of luck in the contest!
wisinald -
I never learned swimming in my life
but it was you only who inspired me to swim
in the river of your breasts
and inspired me to swim until I reached
with the quality of the impeccability
must say that it was your passion
what monopolized me towards the voyage of
your two flowers
am grateful to you that you never act me to stop
while I lick all your melody
what you file in the breasts with you
speak the truth that I love your breasts so much
because they were the stimuli behind when I exposed you
the first time with my words saying I love you
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These lines are just beautiful and you whole piece is just sensual and it's such great imagery. I loved that you used my picture as inspiration. Thank you for that. Words can't even desribe how much I loved your entry. Very touching. Thanks again for entering and best of luck in the contest.
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I love this poem, great work on this!!
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You certainly get to the heart of the matter here, Poet. The first and fourth stanzas are, for me, the most erotic, not only for the use of suggestive language, 'swim in the river of your breasts, while I lick all your melody, and when I exposed you the first time' but for the use of beautiful images, 'essence of this galaxy, voyage, flowers'. A woman likes to be wooed and this language does just that. Well written! Peace, Rhonda
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Aaaaaw! How beautiful! Honestly, it's breathetaking! Who knew a picture like that should make somebody write such a great write? Amazing job. Keep up the great work!
Tori
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Very beautiful words here, my friend! Such beauty always caresses the heart of the reader....good luck in this contest...smiles, Terry
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