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A Mind Is A Terrible Thing To Waste

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just an old shack,
wallpapered with dreams-
peeling away,
to roll and dissolve-
into the hot asphalt-
of reality;

I kicked feet against-
rotten walls;
bracing myself against-
barriers,
stronger than they looked,
losing my perspective;

so I lit thought
and sucked it into-
nostrils;
lucidity blowing-
away,
into haze;

burning within,
was desire-
unrealized;
tethered precariously,
to that old worn-
shack,
that was my mind;

stagnated within;
waiting too long to act-
striving not hard enough
and was disillusioned-
with life;

that endlessly-
seemed to crawl -
along that long winding road,
but always leading me-
right back to where-
I started;

a mind,

 

is a terrible thing-

 

to waste...


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  • -Ink Artist-
    May 8, 2007
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    Truly a creative metaphor used here, bold move to combine the reality of losing our mind's control with the rusting away of an old shed. Imagery was well done with some interesting phrasing mixed in to grab and hold attention. Another fascinating write! Thanks for your entry!


    ~Lori


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 15, 2007

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    A wonderful write with a very powerful ending. I love the way you have taken the reader through the various times that our minds want to escape and the extent some will go to just to escape life, losing part of their mind each time.
    Excellent portrayal of this.
    All the best in this contest
    gaylene