He's got a bushy head of mud brown hair
The grit not yet gone from his fingernails
He'd not clean himself even for a dare
He would rather keep his breath smelling stale
His brothers are the deer out on the plains
The creatures of the forest are his friends
He share's their daily life of love and pain
And stays by their sides 'til the very end
He asks the wolves why they howl at the moon
And wonders how the animals have been
He wanders in the wood from morn' 'til noon
And listens to the voices of the wind
A creature of the wild tried and true
His heart's the one you wish you had in you
Author notes
Surprisingly, inspired by the song "Colors of the Wind". It's surprising because I haven't seen the movie "Pocahontas" in years. In Shakespearean sonnet form. Iambic pentameter and the rhyme scheme is: ababcdcdefefgg
A contest entry
- Inspire me by RecollectionsUnited.
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Comments
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i liked the rhyme verry good but it left me wondering who is this persone what is he like were is he from. its lacking in detail
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thank you!! you are very clear about telling the form in which you used. (brownie points!!) I think it is interesting that you were inspired to write this by Colours of the Wind....i like that song, by the way, and i am very glad to have seen a different angle on it. great work! thank you for entering my contest!
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I like how you followed the shakespearean form to describe how society would view this man, and then switched over, as you're supposed to, to show the innocence, and (due to a mind blank and loss of the words I'm looking for, I'll use this one) awesomeness of the character in the end of the poem. Overall it was a good poem, however, I hate slant rhymes. They bug me. Doesn't mean you won't win, but keep that in mind for my future contests. I didn't find it particularily inspiring, but yeah, like I said earlier, overall it was a good poem. Thanks for entering, and best of luck.
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