L.o.v.e and l a u g h t e r
is replaced with the overwhelming desire to
h/a/t/e and c*r*y
to slowly [fade away] and [let go]
of past promises and "i love yous"
Time to just f.o.r.g.e.t and e r a s e
the memories and everything that happened
all the p/a/i/n and s*c*a*r*s
conceived by the overwhelming attempts
to [save] something that would never be w h o l e
F.o.r.g.e.t about the lost l o v e
and the nights crouched over the
b/l/o/o/d and steel b*l*a*d*e*s
shedding *crimson tears*
for someone who [didn't even care]
E.r.a.s.e away the l a u g h t e r
rip away the notes written with
b/l/o/o/d/y hearts and g*o*o*d*b*y*e*s
because you never wanted to (hear them)
&&& you never wanted the t r u t h
T.e.a.r away the p a g e s
that we wrote together in the night
b/u/r/n them to an [ember b l a c k]
and scatter the ashes
across all the *faded memories*
Use the b/l/a/d/e once again to
s|e|v|e|r|e the ties of your image
bleed you from my v.e.i.n.s and
rid you from my conscience forever
so I can [forget] all the memories
that ever went w r o n g
Author notes
the option i chose was #5 but it does have #2 mixed in with it...im not sure its what your looking for...im not sure if you like the dirtypretty style but here it is anyways
A contest entry
- My First Contest by fallenangel671.
800 points, ended May 6, 2007, 94 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your best prewrite EVER! by love tank x.
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oh my goshshhshshshshs. i love this droid. itss booful. gorgeous. simply pure brilliance.
"all the p/a/i/n and s*c*a*r*s
conceived by the overwhelming attempts
to [save] something that would never be w h o l e"
Its so amazingly deep and meotional its like AHH. idk i jus tlove it .and im dead tired now. so u get the point. i love it.
=]
M.e.g.a.n
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lol why thank you megan...it is really quite interesting when i saw your comment i was actually browsiing through soem other people profiles looking for soemthing to read and then your comment came up and i was like whoa and it took awhile to adjust my eyes...lol
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this was a nice poem and awesome write, i liked all of your previous ones, there was lot of them, well anyways good luck in the contest.
keep writing
~Ashley~<3
edit so sorry hun i had a blonde moment i didnt realise it was saying system message instead of users names. woops anyways it was still a good poem. -
=] i love this. its great.
AHH.
*Megan*
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hahah I helped you with this one.... lol. wow it doesn't sound like you at all but I love this. lol.
darling.
you did great.
even if it did take you over an hour to write it.
lol
good job darling.
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