Every time I see him
he annoys me so much.
He doesn’t even have to talk to grate my nerves.
I just think
“go away and leave me the hell alone.”
I can’t even stand the thought of him.
The other week, I bought him a hat - £25
He said he’d pay me back,
but he hasn’t.
So when I see him, I threaten,
“next time I see you, if you don’t pay up
I’ll kick your butt.”
Agh, I hate him.
But last week, you know
he asked me ‘round to his house,
I think he was trying to “get in” with me.
I said “erm, I don’t think so…
1) you’re ugly
2) you’re fat and
3) you have a girlfriend."
He is so annoying. I hate him.
Author notes
Simple and completely different to my other writes.
what do you think?
NB poem is NOT based on fact.
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First thing I thought when I came at the second stanza is that this poem is completely different from what I have read from you this far. And difference doesn't have to be bad in this case. Okey, it's maybe not my favourite (Constellations still is - lol) but it's definately far better then half of the things I've read this far (and that's a lot
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Anyway, the link with your poetry and title is remarkable. If I wouldn't have thought about it, I wouldn't have get it (something's wrong with the grammar in that line but I can't find it - LOL)
Anyway, the fact that you 'hate' him, and say that he's 'fat' is just because you know you can't get him...
Well done
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I think it works well...different, but different is good at times..I and feel this is one of those times...had a touch of humor strung in within your words that made it a treat to read, thanks for sharing
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I think I would have liked it better if I thought it was true! lol...I really think you did a great job with this one. great job! This shows a real departure from what you usually write. I liked it. keep up the great work. peace and light always, kp
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I love the contradiction between the title and the actual write. It's very unique, good job.
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that was good! kinda mean though I almost feel bad for him. when I read the title "I have a crush on him..." I was expecting it to be about how much you like him not about how much you hate him Irony! anyway great job!!!
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Nicely done
Ahhh we don't always really like the people we end up falling for do we?
Nicely done and soooo believable.
good write
Jill/Cherry xxx
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I have not read your other writes to know the vast difference this poses but this reads to me more like a girl that a crush she doesn't want to admit to as opposed to someone who is angry and completely untouched by the spell this person holds over her. Either that or the guy is one major player and knows how to weild his way into the protagonist's good graces to get what he wants.
♥ Touchof1der
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