Soul plundered by battle;
soldier seeks strength and hope,
surrenders to God's grace.
Sheltered under His wing;
sorrow tenderly soothed.
Savior bares holy arm;
solace found; hallowed ground.
Joyce Josephson
Author notes
Pleiades:
This titled form was invented in 1999 by Craig Tigerman, Sol Magazine's Lead Editor. Only one word is allowed in the title followed by a single seven-line stanza. The first word in each line begins with the same letter as the title. Hortensia Anderson, a popular haiku and tanka poet, added her own requirement of restricting the line length to six syllables.
single 7 line stanza
six syllables in each line
Same letter which single word title begins with
is uses as the first letter of the first word in each line.
From: Shadow Poetry.com
http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/pleiades.html
My prayer is that our soldiers find moments of God's light and peace amid the chaos and soul plundering of war. I support the soldiers, who my government has put in harm's way in Iraq for no apparent reason.
* art by Danny Hahlbohm *
In a list
- Form Poetry: Pleiades, Haiku, Etheree, etc. • next in list
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- Honoring God • next in list
A contest entry
- Pleiades Picture Competition III by ShelleyA.
525 points, ended April 21, 2007, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Thank you USA soldiers round 3 by z etoile.
300 points, ended April 25, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Soldier Side by Hypocritical Oath.
600 points, ended November 7, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Support Our Troops by Frodofan.
450 points, ended November 20, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Tight Poem
Well expressed in few words. Wonderful picture. Faith's values are refreshing in light of a difficult war experience. This is the heart of a faithful and faithfilled warrior; coming to terms with his own finiteness and brokeness.(Male soldier pictured.)Pleiades is a welcome and obscure addition to my knowledge bank. Thank you for your research and information.
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A nice prayer and nice picture you chose to compliment your writing.
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Touching
Oh I am in tears as I read this wonderful and amazing poem so deserving of the Gold! It spoke right to my heart. I don't agree with the war either, but I have two sons in the Marines, I don't support the war but I do support our troops they are just doing there jobs it is not their fault that our leaders our power mad. Anyways thanks for the link to this amazing poem. Brav
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Great
Wow, that's a great piece, I'm in awe. Well done, and good luck!
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This is a wonderful pray for our soldiers. I agree with you in the hope of God light in their time of need. This melted my heart it is so filled with compassion for our soldiers.
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Wow short yet moving great job
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Thank you very much!
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Exceptional penning...
I want to congratulate you on a beautiful presentation of this intriguing form, you have skillfully penned a deep and meaningful piece, it brought a tear to my eyes...well done
~Lilac
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Beautifully penned, Congratulations on the Gold, this piece complements the photo and has a depth of feeling to it and your note is special, too...
All the best to you!
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Thank you on your comments. I must say, I'm happy with this poem.
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Freed this is terrific! Definitely deserving of the gold! As shelley said the internal rhyme is great! Hopefully they will all be home soon!
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Congratulation on your win, I felt this one had gold written on it. Excellent write!!
Sam
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Good title. Very good write. Perfect form. Very good flow and tone. Nice imagery. Lovely depth of feeling. Very good word choice. Good alliteration and nice assonance. Excellent last line (good internal rhyme). Your poem suits the picture for which it was written. A well crafted piece. Shelley
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I admit it...
I teared up. My son, Luke, is a U.S. Marine. He will be making his 2nd tour to Iraq in September. I wear a necklace that has his dogtags on it and a St. Michael medalion. It also has this prayer written very small on the medal:
"St. Michael, the Archangel, defend us in battle. Be our defense against the wickedness and snares of the devil. May God rebuke him we humbly pray. And may you, O Prince of the Heavenly Hosts by the Divine Power of God -
cast into hell, satan and all the evil spirits,
who roam throughout the world seeking the ruin of souls. "
I love that prayer and your poem is beautiful. I will print it and put it in his scrapbook. (((hugs))) Myth
Write on, poet.
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Wow, Mythtress, You just made my day! Thank you so much for your comment. You just never know when something you write will touch another's soul.
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Thank you. It really is beautiful. And I can now print it with your name. Grins.
Write on, Poet.
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Wonderful
What a great depiction of God as a Shield against the most dangerous of odds. Good luck in the contest.
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Excellent poem. the Rhetoric and Metaphors are quite appropriate
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Thank you!
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Wonderfully penned
Well done indeed with this form. Hope you found it interesting. Great thoughts expressed in this also. I am sure if our soldiers read this they would find much solace in these words.
All the best in this contest
Gaylene
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Thanks so much for your kind words!
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