‘And they called it puppy love’
But you were a year older
I feel for your smile, that cheeky grin
Your stupid sense of humour
Those awful jokes
Your ego and your art
How you loved David
‘Cherish, is a word’
That still applies even though years have flown
We have moved on from childish love
So many days, happy and sad
We have tasted
Yet we never tasted each other
We were good Catholic kids
It was forbidden fruit
Did you crave it as much as I?
Do you wonder?
My life has been filled with so much sadness
I have no one now at my side
Your wife bears my name
And I wonder?
If we had tasted would things have been different?
If we had not fought our good fight
But given in to animal instinct
Would I be the mother of your children,
Instead of she?
Our conflict between being good and evil
Was it as we perceived?
I loved you then as I love you now
Your phone number is in my book
Do I pick up the phone?
For old times sake?
My heart still reaches out to you
I know it always will
But my conscience as always stands in the way
Author notes
When I was 15years old I fell for Jerry and we were very close for several years after that. I never had the courage to tell him how I felt even though we were great friends and spent so much time together.
I look back now and wonder about what might have been.
A contest entry
- Conflicts: Good versus Evil by Stonecosta.
530 points, ended May 2, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Much to ponder... MUUUUCH to ponder... I like poems like that. Ahh, but aren't what-ifs so cruel...
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Stonecosta
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Stonecosta
Yes much to ponder lol he was my first love
although there was nothing physical as we were far too good lol
Thanks for your lovely comments
Hugs
Jill/Cherry xxx
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wow i really liked that... and it just makes me want to tell a guy thats been my friend since like we were in diapers that i do love him, and that hes great before i dont have to chance... but lol that might be awkward.. hehe but anyways good write... Great write!
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LonelyWonders19
LOL Hmmm I would think hard before spoiling a good friendship
LOL they are worth their weight in gold
Good Luck sweetheart (hug)
I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem
Hugs
Jill/Cherry xxx
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The reader feels disconnected with the poem. It focuses too much on the persona. I feel that the poem is not that solid and may benefit a lot with some edits. However, the conflict is real and maybe it will be better if you focused on the conflict instead. Keep on writing!
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Life Messenger
Hello love, thanks for you comments, I did not realise it would be read so personal, it seems that through the introduction of the internet more and more childhood sweethearts are getting back together, unfortunately in some cases whether they have partners or not, I thought it was therefore quite topical. LOL I am sorry if you felt it was too personal.
I will leave it as it is for the moment but I will do another poem less personal.
Thanks so much for all your comments they really are appreciated
Hugs
Jill/Cherry xxx
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Hi this seems too personel to put into poetry- it's like you are talking directly to him and not to anyone else. There is a lot of connections only he and you could understand. I am sure that is the way you intended the poem to be- and you did a great job making it that way. Somehow it's hard to read though, because it's like opening the door to the bedroom, and seeing all the details. The reader wants to tippy toe away, close the door, and hope the person never realized they peaked in by accident.
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Duana
lol I did not realise that lmao. I was actually thinking of a conflict in my own life and this was easy to focus on. He was my childhood sweetheart and I felt that there would be many out there like me who still had feelings that way.
Things change and we change you can never go back even if the temptation is there
I'm so pleased you read my poem lol I like my poetry to have an affect on people so I will let you tip toe away now.
Thanks so much for all your comments
hugs
Jill xxx
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what a delightful interpitation of this contest. It spins a tale that aches with memories.
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Starrchild777
Thanks Starr,
I think it is the same with a lot of people they never forget their first love and it stays fresh because in a way it is so pure.
Hugs
Jill/Cherry xxx
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I FORGOT TO PUT THE SMILES!!! THIS IS A DISASTER!! Sorry!
lol, I guess I over-reacted...sorry 'bout that!
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Erin200
LOL Erin giggles
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very deep poem!! I know how u feel!! Just live for today ,don't live for the past
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Lauren07
Thanks Lauren, yes I intend to
Hugs
Jill/Cherry xxx
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A very deep poem. Good job. I can't applause but I will put six big smiles!
(I can't use applause because it costs points and I'm saving them for a contest, good job, and good luck in the contest! ) -
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Erin200
LOL no problem
I'm glad you enjoyed my poem so much
Hugs
Jill/Cherry xxx
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