You think this is all a game
I'll show you a fucking game
You think it's fun?
See what you think when I'm the one
holding a gun to your head
See how you feel then
See how you made me feel
See what you made me do?
Look at the bomb
Exploding in your face
Oh, sorry, didn't mean to kill you
You were in my way
What am I doing?
I'm killing people
I'll show you what it's like to be hated
Maybe when you're lying on the fucking floor
in a puddle of your own blood,
maybe then you'll understand
See what you made me do?
Cop car, flashing lights
The bomb didn't go off
There's irony for you
But I'm not the one who starts fights
I'm just the one
Holding the gun
I'm the one with the power now
I'm the one laughing now
I'm the one laughing in your face
as I pull the trigger
I'm the one having fun
Bastard, label me a troublemaker
And maybe now you know what it's like
to be hated
Author notes
columbine - option 3
A contest entry
- Columbine Option Contest -- Updated 4/20 by SoS.
450 points, ended May 25, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Im not sober all the time by ProvehitoInAltum.
400 points, ended November 7, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Magical Word of F*ck :) by ultimate beluga.
450 points, ended November 14, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i really hope this isnt what you actually think...
ive written quite a few 'from the killer's point of view' pieces myself, so i was naturally attracted to that in this. this is an awesome example, it sounds soo real... not so real in the way that it scared me (unless thats what you honestly feel!!) but it sounds to be written in a realistic voice. nice swearing, too!
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haha no thank god but if you look at the contests its entered in the columbine option contest is what it was written for
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that was hardcore
It made me surprised that your emotion could link
to this incident so well
Great job
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Wow.. the emotion in this was so raw.. it kinda made me angry. It's something I believe everyone can probably relate to.. and it's good that you can take a situation that people judge with ignorance.. and make a connection between the judge and judged.
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WOW... I can't believe how well you captured the feelings of those who are tormented day after day and resort to such desperate measures! Lots of hate, pain, and revenge going on here! This piece was very well-penned indeed! Let us all keep those students and their families in our prayers.
Blessings,
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wow this is an awesome write! it has so much impact and strong feelings of hate and anger bursting through.
I dont believe that there was too much cursing, I actually prefer cursing in a way, as it is now in our everyday language when we speak and it only adds impact to the message you are trying to get across.
awesome write!!
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Wow you really did get your point across. Personally I don't think youi swore too much in this. I felt it was well placed in an emotional manner to show the hated more explicitly. For one who has suffered abuse it needs to be explicitly explored. However I am not the contest holder.
All the best to you with this
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Hmm, you got the point across, but I think the constant language didsn't really add anything. Good luck.
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k... it wasn't that constant... and it did need that to get the message across...
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I disagree. You could have have gotten the same effect without the cursing.
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all right, but there still wasn't that much cursing, and i think it did fit in context, it wasn't just randomly inserted
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