The very air around
felt tired and slow,
like all of time did stop
in her calm, quiet presence.
She looked at me carefully,
taking the measure of me,
deciding if I was worthy
of some knowledge that she held.
The wrinkles on her face
held an air of wisdom,
as she closed her watery eyes
and licked her thin dry lips.
Her rice paper fingers
brushed some loose strands
of her soft, gray hair
back towards its’ bun.
“I’ve lived a long time,
and seen a lotta things.
Yet there is just one thing
I ever found that mattered.”
“Life is not just something
that we need to get through.
Our life is a gift from God,
and should be a gift to God.”
With this wisdom
dutifully bestowed,
she seemed to deflate,
resting against a pillow.
I watched her for awhile,
feeling quite unworthy,
of these words
that took a lifetime to learn.
Please tell me what you think
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This is phenomenal! Just beautiful! Such an aerial view of the phases of existence. Well written with so much context. The old woman's advice is in a perfect place in the poem.Very climactic as I anticipated her words.You must be proud of your wisdom to recognize the lesson that was taught in this piece.
HAPPYNESS ALWAYS,
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such beautiful words you have gifted us with here in this poem. you have some real good insight here. thank you so much for sharing it. i believe it is something everyone can benefit from. keep writing! God bless you always
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thank you for the terrific comment, I appreciate it. huggsss!!!!!!!!!!
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This was beautiful! Your imagery was incredible, from beginning to end. I believe that you captured beauty within each stanza and the entire write together was just wonderful. A lovely message of wisdom, hope, life and love. A gift we have indeed! This was certainly my pleasure to read
~Tia
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I really appreciate the wonderful comment you gave to this poem. hugggsssss!!!!!!!!!
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This is absolutely amazing. Such profound wisdom comes from these penned words. So many times we find ourselves wrapped up in our own world without taking time to listen to the one's with wisdom.
great job on this one sister. the best i've seen from you I love it!
becky
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thank you very much for that terrific comment. I loved listening to the residents of the nursing home where I use to work. We need to recognize their wisdom. thank you again, huggggssss!!!!!!
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wow
now i am in tears, for her for i know she has parted this wisdom perhaps for her last time entrusting it to you as the messenger.
for you because i see how greatly this touched you.
and for the world that must hear this.
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Thank you for that comment. I guess, like most people, I see age associated with wisdom. I started wondering, what one thing could someone pass on that would have a profound impact on others lives. Anyways, that is how this poem came to be. thank you again. hugggssss!!!!!!
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Wow this is my favorite it is your best work yet it sent chills up my spine very beautiful write if I could give you more then 3 applauds I would this really touched me and made me think of my grandmother well done your talent really shined through this you did an amazing job never let the ink run dry my dear poet friend.
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thank you very much for your wonderful comment, I really appreciate it. thank you, hugggsss!!!!!!!!!!
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wow
Li lady, i realy like the way you wrote this poem and the message you bestowed is just awesome.......joe
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thank you very much for the wonderful comment, I am really glad that you enjoyed this. huggsssss!!!!!!
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