I met you standing in a crowd
I caught your eye, I did my best
Our wedding came and so we vowed
I said hello, I spoke out loud
You asked me if I’d be your guest
I met you standing in a crowd
Head held high and feeling proud
My heart was pounding in my chest
Our wedding came and so we vowed
I felt like shouting very loud
We knew at once we’d take loves test
I met you standing in a crowd
Our life together so endowed
Just about then, fait did the rest
Our wedding came and so we vowed
Through dates and courting we have ploughed
I knew right then my life was blessed
I met you standing in a crowd
Our wedding came and so we vowed
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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I like the romantic quality of this one. It's nicely done. A couple spots the rhyme seems barely a tad forced but overall it encompasses the form and mood well. I liked it
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Aww. This was sweet.
great form.
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Very beautiful. I love the way you put sentences together that just roll off the tongue
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Another beautiful form and beautiful flow. You are such a master of form poetry, it is always a pleasure to read it.
So well done, with lovely line repeated in each stanza, making it all the more enjoyable.
Nicely done as always!
Love
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wow!
I really liked reading your poetry. You have talent and I like your rhyme scheem! I will happily read much more of your poetry!!!!
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Enjoyed being part of your wedding, thanks again for the invite. Loved it. Like this poem too - the repetition at the end of the verses reinforces the love and meaningful relationship of two who marry.
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Lovely words of love...well done...the form and flow of the words went well through out the poem, I enjoyed the read, thanks for sharing
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Wonderful
Like a song. Wonderful words. Great imagery. Wonderful flow to the piece as well. Keep writing. This was very very good indeed.
Wayne
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Wayne
Thank you Wayne, for the roses too.
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Wonderful! I love it. The flow was clear and melodic. The rhyming crisp, and the meaning was spot on. Three bunnies.
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PROUD&BOLD
PRIDE IS A GOOD HELPER BE GLAD YOU HAVE IT DON'T LOOSE IT. -
Nice. the repetition stuck with me after i had finished reading through. Rather sweet. Goodluck in the contest.
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This is such a touching piece...
I like that you repeat several lines..
Beautifully written...
Thank you for sharing best wishes with this entry.
Peace
~M~
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Fate or faith did the rest? Apart from that an interesting read. Well done.
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Good point! Do you think faith would be better?
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hey....its really really good!!!
i loved the flow....and i loved the feel!!!
thanks for sharing!!!
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