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The Cabin

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As we walked the valley floor beside the cool and gushing stream,

the mountains rose a hazy blue, a vision seen as in a dream.

 

Majestic sun in all its splendour rose above a snow capped peak,

casting shadows in the mist, no words that we could find to speak.

 

Pine trees rose to meet the snow line, eagles soared the clear blue sky,

deer were drinking by the water, not a soul but you and I.

 

Squirrels searched for buried food among the dead and rotting leaves,

rustling sounds disturb the peace, a special magic spell it weaves.

 

We climb the jagged mountain path between the tall and mighty pine,

the air so cold and crisp and clear, the day so bright and fine.

 

We reached the old log cabin which was such a welcome sight

as flakes of snow begin to fall and a bitter wind to bite.

 

The welcome door was opened and beyond a roaring fire,

a warming cup was offered, to fill a heart's desire.

 

The snow was falling faster now a wondrous sight to see,

here within this cosy room we’re sheltered you and me.

 

As we watch the scene transform before our weary eyes,

we snuggle up together and sigh contented sighs.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Judith Chandler
    June 29, 2008

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    Nice write about a winter day in the country. I was struck by the squirrels searching for food and the last few stanzas were comforting and romantic.

    I like the use of rhyming couplets.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • BluRosePoet8488
    April 28, 2008

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    Well done. This imagery brings peace and evokes heartwarming feelings. You take the reader along on a journey and lets them feel the warmth and coziness that you were feeling. Very well written. It just rolling off the tip of the tongue perfectly. Thank you for sharing. Keep the ink flwoing and good luck!
    ~Donna~


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    What a lovely write Sue!! I came along with you on that and felt the cold and then the coziness!
    Gorgeous


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    April 21, 2008

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    This reminds me alot of my poem Natures Rhyme which hopefully I can get posed before to much longer. Although yours is done alot better than mine was.

    As usual thought your rhyme and rythm are impeccable. You really are an awesome writer and hopefully one day i can get my poems to ahve the perfect flow that yours always seem to have. Its great.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    April 15, 2007

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    Outstanding!!!

    The imagery put in the reader's mind here is outstanding. I could see everything that was going on here. Wonderful writing skills here. I could see the pine trees and the snow, could feel the cool, crisp air, everything. Brilliant writing. Could even see the log-cabin.

    Great writing Sue.

    Wayne
    xxxx


  • Whoochi gold member
    April 14, 2007

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    Oh so lovely a scene, a place of dreams and warmth...I am packing my bags now, send me the directions will you! Excellent!


  • Poetic Aphrodite
    April 14, 2007
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    This is just beautiful and serene Sue, well done, Bella


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 14, 2007

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    SUCH PEACE!

    This would be to me much like Heaven on Earth. Warm fire, snow blowing outside with the mountains all around, the trees, a deer or moose here and there, what could ever be more peaceful.

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