the pain I feel
the cold within
is hidden still
some how my heart sin
I became diffrent from my kin
unable to face reality
I begin to live in partiality
plying in the light
yet my heart consumed by the dark
I became a stranger in the midst of those i call freind
I smile i pretend
they dont understand
neither do I seek so, I need not for them to bear my pain
but the pain
the pain I feel
the cold within
is real
Please tell me what you think
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Welcome to allpoetry
Your structure could use some work. Try to make all the lines even. Pain is a difficult thing to deal with. Especially when it is emotional and not just physical.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
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thanks
thank you for your honest opinion, i am a beginner and i really appreciate ur comments thank you
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