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I knew it when(pre-written)

I knew it when his hands went through mine as if a ghoast...
And walked up to her, very concerned.
His hands, his fingers, looking as if they had to strain themselves from touching her.
Asked if she needed help, if she was sure.
Then turned around...with a surprised look, as if i had just appeared.
He took my hand...and we fallowed right behind her FAT ASS BACK!

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Written July 16th, 2003

A contest entry

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  • SilverxXxShadow
    July 16, 2003
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    This is an interesting piece you have here. I don't really know what to say about it, which isn't a bad thing. I'm just not sure I really get it all that well. It seems a bit confusing, but then again I'm a pretty stupid person. Well, thanks for entering....good luck.

    ~Shadow

  • whokarez
    July 16, 2003
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    :lol: that is funny