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The Missed Date

I thought I was the lucky one
I always had a buck or two
Been out on the beach since quarter to three
And now it is almost four
Thought I’d wait until five
I promised I’d be home by six

I started home at quarter to six
He never showed, so he wasn’t the one
I bet he took flight on highway five
Thinking one was better than two
I think he said he was thirty four
But he acts like a child of three

The clock on the beach also said three
And three was nowhere near six
He thought our date was at four
He knew I was the only one
And he knew our date would be two
so why am I still here past five

Lifting my hand and fingers five
I smacked myself; was our date planned at three
What a fool I am, I could have been here at two
I knew that at ten-to-six
The watch I wore was the broken one
I thought our date was at four

I knew the clock had been stuck on four
I thought it would never reach five
Thinking this guy would be the one
I showed up early at three
Hours, and it was, not almost six.
And he was later than an hour or two

He might have thought our date was at two
The sun really burned me by four
He was planning to purchase six
Bouquets consisting of five
Roses each, then dividing them three and three
three for me and three for another one

Of those three for me he took one
Bouquet of five and leaving two
I should have come at two but I waited until six

 

 

 

 

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  • Jimfre Talbent
    April 15, 2007

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    Brava! This Sestina is a fabulous example of how one can write a piece that is involved and convoluted with a repetitive nature, yet the meaning does not get lost in the use of repetition.

    Or was that repetitive?

    Anywho, the bottom line, this is the first poem of yours I have read, and I started out thinking "Oh lord, I hope she knows where she is going, or else I am going to have to read this fifteen times in order to understand it." Got it on the first try.

    You know the craft, you embrace the craft.

    Off to read more....


    • Amera gold member
      April 15, 2007
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      Thank you

      "You know the craft, you embrace the craft."

      I love the art and that's the highest complement you could have paid me. Again, Thank you

      Love,
      Amera


  • PerVirtuous
    April 14, 2007
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    Very very nice. Funny, too. I will write a sestina today in honor of this! Three bunnies.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    April 14, 2007

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    I've had gals do this to me, in a way, in the dark past a few times. But I've learned from the expereinces. I still send flowers, but very unique ones, ones they always remember and never, ever throw away. some date back a dozen yearsa nd they still have them. Very nice write and my mind followed it as, like I said, been there seen it.

    Most cool, at least to look back on

    Dad


  • williamstown silver member
    April 14, 2007

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    A very interesting arrangement, don`t think I have come across it before, Quite a change from the usual run of the mill stuff. By the way, did you ever meet up?


  • Desire gold member
    April 14, 2007

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    Holy Moly!!

    Powerful piece penned my Friend and love this Sestina!!
    Wow! Intense and just a Magnificent verse
    Loved it!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent

    Best wishes to You in the contest!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Emosie Vloei
    April 14, 2007

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    This was diffrent in a good way..very slick way of writing...what is this form and where can I learn it.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 14, 2007

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    very well done. i started a class on this form but my computer crashed and i couldn't finish. i think it was a blessing in disguise as i could not understand the form to save my life. you have made it seem so easy here. thank you for sharing this with me. viyanna rosemarie

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