As the clouds of uncertainty surround you
everything has stopped
Penetrating vibrations of confusion keeping
you at a distance
You know my truths
they blend together with yours
You know my thoughts
feeling them from afar
They are what keeps our connection
When you walk out of the clouds
with clarity of the path you have chosen,
and the fog of doubt dissipates
Will you continue on your own
Or through your haze will I become
visible in your path
reaching your hand out to me
continuing our journey
Author notes
"I never doubted your self opinions
I doubted the fact that I wasn't invisible to you"
In a list
A contest entry
- && that was the day my heart [bled like eternal rain] by acid eyeliner---x.
300 points, ended November 21, 2007, 16 entries
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WOW!
A beautifully expressed discourse
that allures intrigue.
A viewpoint from which one can ponder
and learn from.
Many times we become so caught up
in ourselves that we forget our
significant other.
Thank you for this enchanting write
that stirrs the emotions and causes
one to do some self reflection.
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Excellent write. This was a lovely journey you took my mind on and I found myself still lost in it at the conclusion of the read. Excellent rhythm and flow throughout and simply captivating. My pleasure to read
~Tia
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Excellent
Very well written
Your skill showes well in this
Interesting thought
Rick
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Good description here. I liked your use of alliteration for example 'doubt dissipates'. This was a very well worded poem
Thanks for your comments
Pozo
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Sometimes being blind doesn't mean the loss of sight. Mental blindness can change the outlook of the whole world which is always met with such a heavy price... In the long run they usually find out what they have lost meant more than anything else. Bravo, my friend on such a beautiful poem....
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this is utterly amazing and wow what a pic you ahve excelled yourself with this one dear well done it awesome xxx
laura xxxx
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SO SOFT AND BEAUTIFUL!
We do feel our love reaching out to us but some so often turn away from them and keep them out. Beautiful thoughts.
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I like it. Good job. Three bunnies for this.
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I like the message here. There isn't anything in this entire write that doesn't invoke thoughts. I believe the final stanza is the most provocative to me...
"When you walk out of the clouds
with clarity of the path you have chosen,
and the fog of doubt dissipates
Do you continue on your own
Or through your haze will I become
visible in your path
reaching your hand out to me
continuing our journey"
Well chosen words Noreen. Very thought provoking write. Thanks for sharing
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Well done
This is a wonderful poem on relationship. Sometimes we are invisible to our loved ones but there is nothing we can do about. We can only pray that they will choose to reach our their hand to us so we can continue our journeying together.
Excellent message.
Hugs
- joanne
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~~~~~~Breathtaking~~~~~~~
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ICU!
Great write. I love how you paint this picture. We are known to each other by our energies. You always give me stuff to think about.
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