If my song sounds melancholy,
A different, minor tune,
If my smile seems bittersweet
Watch, and read the news.
If my eyes seem foggy,
Unfocused, out of place,
If my touch seems tentative,
Still, rejoice in my embrace.
If my heart seems hidden,
And far from any choice,
If my soul seems far away
My body's here, hear my voice.
I chose to live, forever on,
For others, I've decided.
So though I may seem still so sad
I'll do best with what fate's provided.
Author notes
I attempted suicide last friday. I'm not ashamed, I'm not thankful I was stopped. This poem speaks in volumes what I want to say.
Critiques highly discouraged, please.
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Well, I won't pretend I know what's going through your mind. I attempted suicide a couple years ago, but no two people live in the same circumstances, so I can't possibly know where you're coming from. Just know that there is plenty to live for out there...you just have to dig around to find it sometimes. Great poem, and I hope things start looking up for you soon :-)
~Robby~
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wow
This poem is incredible. With your ability and talent why would you want to kill yourself? I'm soo glad you didn't and you made the right choice. Awesome job, Jane
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It's an illnes, or so I'm told.
Thank you for the compliment and applause.
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This is beautiful. After I read the comments, I was stunned. How could anyone who writes this well would want to attempt suicide?
I've been in your shoes though, attempted suicide 4 times in 3 months, but I got help. You are worth so much, and I hope you realize that. I know I'm probably just another person whose said this, and being 17 probably doesn't help either, but you have so much for you.
Trust me, I know.
Nice job. I like it.
~ I.t.
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Thank you for your comment.
While I understand everything cognitively, and know where the biases and inconsistencies lie... it's just a personal failing within me.
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