[Porcelain whore]
frail as the needle
penetrating her vein,
---this is her life,
as she .locks. herself in her room
to face the mirror,
herself,
and her only true friend...
Ana*** smiles back at her
as her stomach growls,
"just 10 more pounds,
just hit 85.... the perfect weight"
Empty By Choice
she gives in to temptation,
a forbidden binge,
&& Ana*** introduces her friend...
knees.meet.[t]il[e]
&& shes d
o
w
n
on the floor
ribs >cave< in----stomach .b.l.e.e.d.s.
shes Crying...
Time is her enemy
as she counts the (((rings))) around her eyes
c o m p l a c e n t && e m p t y
her stomach growls,
[no.way.out]
A contest entry
- giiiive up babe && droown yourself in a.c.i.d [i lalalaloved you] by PaperChainHearts.
450 points, ended May 3, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - She's Got A Body Like An HourGlass And Its Ticking Like A Clock--x by Dead Star--x.
475 points, ended May 12, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
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zomg
<3
*finalist*
thats all I can say Im speechless
♥
This comment sucks, but this poem rawks my skinny socks =)
Dead Star--x
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Oh wow. This is so...REAL.
Very very true.
Great job [& congrats on your trophy!]
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i luv the title ♥ its so desperate and the poem has awesome imagery! ♥
-Cure My Tragedy- -
Empty By Choice
she gives in to temptation,
a forbidden binge,
&& Ana*** introduces her friend...
knees.meet.[t]il[e]
&& shes d
o
w
n
on the floor
ooooh. this is....really sad ! but amaze all the same. -
I know of this all too well. I'm one of those ohsolucky "in recovery" people myself. Still sort of battling with that, and it's a tough fight. You portrayed this perfectly. Beautiful!
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that was deep...not in that general "im trying to sound like im smart" deep....but the more "i felt pillaged after i read it..as if it chew me up and spit me out
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I can...
...not relate personally, haven't been there but you're poem made me feel as though I was... I love it when someone can take an experience like this, so personal and painful, and make it beautiful and share it in spite of the pain
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WOW.. i dont know what to say...except beautiful poem...I'm seriously speechless
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Your poem has such substance and then you turn it into a piece of visible art as well. AWESOME WELL WRITTEN
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oh wow...been there done that...this is absolutly amazing. i truly hope your not going through it because it's painful not only to go through it but to not be able to be happy with yourself...well amazing poem.
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i so can relate
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I love the raw emotion in this. It's a great way to portray an eating disorder. Great write.
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'[Porcelain whore]
frail as the needle
penetrating her vein'
these are my favourite three lines =]=]=] i also love the ending '[no.way.out]'love the theme =] original =] great write =]
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