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Wondering

Long are the days I've sat and watched
Alone to my thoughts, My wonderings of life
I've pondered why things have become as such

What I became caused so much strife.

 

Outcasted, Betrayed, I've lost it all

Or have I? can this be a new start?               Never going back, My old life now gone

Seeking a new, not looking back.                   I've changed. Forever, my clan is lost.

My life is not as it seems, my thoughts have shown me that.

Leaking the old life from me with the new life's cost

I accept my destiny, look to it openly             I despise my fate, but can do nothing

So I sit upon this rock and ponder this form

I seek to understand, and yearn to learn

What plan my fate shall bring to me

What will I've been chosen for             What curse will next be placed on me

That will change my life forever.

 

I've become what I once hated

Hated from fear of the unknown

Unknown because we choose not to learn

Learn about those that are cursed

Cursed... or is it... Blessed... my thoughs now wonder

Author notes

So... i've toused a few different styles in there.
the top part was a simple rhyme of the second and 4 line
the middle section was a style i formed myself. the Symmetrical Antonyms style. to read this, you must read the left side with the middle as a poem, and the right side with the middle as another poem.
the last section, the last word in each line is the word starting the next line.

this poem is about a man who has become a werewolf and is now thinking on why it happened to him. his thoughts as a man are being transformed after his body has been transformed. the middle part shows that he is still conflicting in himself on whether or not this transformation is a good thing or a bad thing.

~Darc Raven, the Bard or Old

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  • Net
    September 3
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    Had to read this again, really do love it


  • HerexIxDie
    August 11
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    This is really good. Very well written.

  • Net
    August 3
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    I love the way this is written

    Both the words and the way you set it out. I didn't see it as it was meant until reading the notes. I thought it sounded good without the explanation though.


  • Eavan Max
    July 26
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    Very nicely written. Very nice indeed a sweet kind of write that shows much conflict and strife. I like how it is. The opposing views with the acceptance as well. Great Write.

  • sleepinglion
    January 27

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    Very powerful

    Everything has already been said which makes it easy for me. Just one thing, I was disapointed that it was turning into a werewolf. I hoped it was something more uplifting, and of course it could be, it just depends which way you look at it.


  • condor gold member
    January 17

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    Brilliantly done. It was easy to follow and very easy to understand in the wording. I like this poem style. It might just catch on....The picture is wonderful and I love how you told us through your words, his plight at being what he is now when once he probably hunted them. Excellent story in itself. It read in such a way that one had to feel a little empathy with him. Just superb!


  • x--nocturnia--x
    September 18, 2008

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    I think this is just wonderful!! What a beautiful conveyance of two minds working as one, and analysation of life... love the style too...


  • Chocolate Chip
    March 16, 2008
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    wow. this style is really amazing! how'd you get the idea for this? it's just sooo amazing..


    • Darc Raven
      March 16, 2008
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      my style was really a fluke from when i was a free member on ap... im me and i'll give you the long story, if you are really interested, lol.


  • Shassidy
    March 16, 2008

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    I really loved this! The different styles that you used in this made this a great poem to read and to see written. It also works very well for the picture and captures the essence of it. I absolutely love this! Great job!


  • Lady Voldemort silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    oh yeah .. we all go through that at some point.

    first I wasn't sure whether the colored lines were supposed to be read one after another or just across like reading a book [if that makes sense...] but whatever. I think I got it. haha


  • Angelflower
    March 16, 2008

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    This was very interesting, but I see people have already said that.I actually liked how you made a new format.. I enjoyed it very much..
    Peace to you, J


  • Morbid Maney
    March 16, 2008

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    interesting
    i have never seen anything like this and i think it is brilliant it can be read as a single poem after the explanation is read and it still makes sense


  • kitty23
    March 16, 2008

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    GOOD WRITE

    great i was caught by the picture at the top lol

    it was imaginative
    well writen
    and all in all VERY good write
    thanks you for sharing this


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    March 16, 2008

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    wow loved the quirky styes you have going on here, it worked with the colours I had t read the AN first though he he, great metaphor throughout and just a genuinely well-penned write


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    It is very good. I really like it alot and glad to see my bard is back at his writtings. It is very imaginative I really do love it.

    *kisses*


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 16, 2008
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    Very creative the way you have put this all together, the colors, the picture, the poem. Lots of thought went into this.


  • Wingsy
    December 17, 2007

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    Your to creative for your own good boy!
    I have told u that before!
    Some times you confuse me!
    But for once I understood it!
    I suppose it was helpfull that you told me how to read it before! *chukles*
    Yup this has to me my fav! *snikers*


  • Foxydaze14
    May 27, 2007
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    I really like it. I love the form and style. You wrote this so well. You did an excellent job on it


  • Sean Ottoson
    May 27, 2007
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    yeah I could do great too if I could change the colors.


  • Sean Ottoson
    May 27, 2007
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    thoughts has a second t.


  • IndividualEleven
    April 15, 2007
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    nice, flows well and portrays excellent thoughts, well done!!!


  • Shade Aurelia
    April 13, 2007

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    Bravo! This is lovely! I very much enjoyed reading this, especially the form of it. It's catching. (check the spelling on your title though ) Good luck.


    Shade

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