I sit in my cage so proud and defiant,
my chains of iron restraint shall never be broken.
Then I feel the cold bite of some fickle air's breath
shudder my senses,
tell I nearly bleed inside from the small shocks
leaving me lightheaded,
unable to control my body.
Suddenly, I shake so violently,
my shackles break and I force open my cage's door.
Invisible fingers grab at my body,
tugging me as if I were a puppet
towards the door of security.
Outside, I stomp like a predator
insanity possessing my soul,
although my mind screams "stop,"
there is no power in me to prevent my prowling
knowing today I'll slaughter something.
Seconds pass like a bad nightmare
before a victim is found and slain,
then I limp crippled back to my illusion
chamber of restraint,
put on my will's cuffs,
pretending the blood stains are paint.
A contest entry
- Impulse by throwing the rocks.
1000 points, ended May 22, 2007, 17 entries
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oh my god! my heart was beating so fast, i was caught up in your story! your imagery is amazing! like always!!!! this is rockin <3
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Thank you so much for the great comment.
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Holy Moly!!
What an Impulse
Powerful piece You have penned!!
Loved this one...
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweetness
Many blessings too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Yep, always a tower of strength of will. Course it is made of jello you know.
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'chamber of restraint,
put on my will's cuffs,
pretending the blood stains are paint'
Last great lines says it all. Sums this poem up so well. Good luck in your contest. ~Sie
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Thank you. Was my view of it at least.
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In line 2, did you mean to write 'will shall'? Line 5, think you want 'till'.
Interesting write, I got a few images of a werewolf, or simply a man who is a monster and kills, though against his own will. Enjoyable..well you know what I mean! Intriguing write!
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Thanks for the great comment. Actually I was saying the person's iron will as in self control. Changed it to iron restraint to make it less confusing. Thanks for pointing it out.
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Oh oopsy, lol, I just read will shall, missed the iron previous...Good write regardless of my denseness!
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Actually, I'm glad you noticed it. That might have confused somebody else too.
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