For all the shadows of yesterday’s dreams
stretched in transparencies across tomorrow,
I venture forth and with determination seek.
As momentum propels life, broken free
I am caught up in its wake, rushing
past glimpses of destinies I long for.
Standing fast upon a precipice high
overlooking my swirling sea of life,
glimpses close seem so far out of reach.
Transparencies stretched to abstraction
for failed attempts and dwindled dreams;
I press through this illusion into tomorrow.
As I walk away from the past, dwellings
and dwellers faded into perpetual twilight
for new horizons grant me hope.
I venture forth and with determination seek,
the many miles tread upon destiny,
for standing still in acceptance to obtain.
A contest entry
- reborn by Misty Sea.
470 points, ended May 13, 2007, 15 entries
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Wow, I like this. It leaves me wanting more, to read more and know more. The flow was extremely smooth and I thought at first that it was going to rhyme (don't ask me why) but then you took it in a whole other direction and that was good. Such strong words and emotions here. Excellent job!
~M~
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I like this
Though it leaves me sad, looking back over roads traveled, it does offer hope filled with determination and "persistence"
A VERY nice word. 
Transparencies have been outlined for their lack of depth in this piece which makes acceptance that much more attainable. I like this. Beautiful work Ken. 
~Pamela 
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Wonderful journey you have taken me on of such rebirth, awakenings..full of hope and inspiration..."As I walk away from the past, dwellings
and dwellers faded into perpetual twilight
for new horizons grant me hope." Am sure all can relate to walking away from the past onto new horizons...I know I sure have and what a weight off my shoulders and a new found freedom it is..! Good luck, thanks for sharing this exquisite journey, and good luck!
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Very meaningful! Not at all "transparent" !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Just my little joke!!!! -
The repetition of transparencies hightens the themewelldone
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Thank you for entering my very first contest on allpoetry!
I really quite like this- not a bad job at all!
The repettion of transparencies seems a little redundant and jars slightly.
But- all that said- a very serious contender.
I enjoyed this.
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