Have you ever been in despair
Not knowing who cares
Having a problem
Not having the guts to let it go
That's how I've felt
Since the day you went away
And I know you can't come back
It's too dangerous
Too hard
I'll have to give it up
All my childish dreams
That someday it'd work out
So I'm slowly letting go
Of everything I had
Reality is harsh
But we all need to face it
It tears at our hearts
Throws away the dreams
knocks us back down
But I had to face it
The day you had to go
I'm slowly letting go
Of all the pain and hurt
That I have been harbouring
I'm slowly letting go of you.
A contest entry
- Impulse by throwing the rocks.
1000 points, ended May 22, 2007, 17 entries
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Comments
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I really like the last two lines. I think it had a very strong ending, and that's a total plus. I definitely loved the word "harbouring".
You don't really have any punctuation besides complete stops, maybe it would help your flow to add in commas, semi-colons, etc. Just a suggestion.
Good write. Good luck in the contest.
Toreh.
PS Very well done with the background/font colours. Very readable and purdiful.
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