Every fall has a rise!
Even water falls to rise as rain.
All mountains are their valley's allies.
Even death takes you above
to be reborn in God's abode!
Fallen flowers rise up as great trees
and drowned waves rise in a heave.
Child is the father of mankind
as the gene of a father does make
a generation into future would partake!
Men are not mortal in this portal
They die and not their bequeathed
eyes, thighs, lungs and heart.
Even when they depart, the love that they sow
shall always live as a furrow!
A contest entry
- reborn by Misty Sea.
470 points, ended May 13, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I think is has great meaning and depth. A very lovely write of live after death. I would not change it to suit others. I would leave it as is, it is from your heart and just because they do not understand it, does not make it a bad write. Just a deep write.
Best to you!
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I feel that the rhyme in this particular poem was extremely forced and distracted me from enjoying it.
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This was such a gay little poem!
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Thanks
Thanks dear for your time. Hope that you frequent my page to stamp your impressions.
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Thank you for entering my very first contest on allpoetry!
I did request that writes were not submitted immediately, and that thought had to be put into them, and that I was not keen on religious poetry.
Looks like you ticked every 'no' box for me!
As you are the first entrant I will be lenient and not DQ you.
There are a couple of lines I like in your piece- but it could do with a bit of tightening up.
I don't quite follow the final 2 lines....'share would always live as a furrow'?
You may edit as many times as you like.
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