She will sup upon your beating heart
Tearing all your dreams apart
Eloquently eating flesh
Drink the blood as to refresh
Tempt your wrath with tools that kill
Take away such weakened will
Blasphemy to waste such sweets
Devouring your bloody treats
Piece by peace she consumes it all
Hour by our hate would enthrall
A temptress of your mind and fate
Winning every lost debate
The glow of red is in her eyes
The color of her tainted guise
A smile found upon her lips
Lost inside her dark eclipse
Passion surrender evermore
The cannibal of human lore
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- Describe what you see (picture) by MotherMachineGunn.
340 points, ended April 26, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Absolutely brilliant.
Powerful, dark and with menace.
Superb writing Sara.
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Ok, once again you have outdone yourself...how you can take something totally whacked and gross and spin it into something eloquent, with such splendid description is amazing...Oh the last line wraps it all up..."Passion surrender evermore the cannibal of human lore" Excellent and ya better win a shiney for this little yukko picture write...
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Very vivid detail here. Wonderful interpretation. Your second stanza really jumped out at me. Nicely written. The last line, really drives it home.
Thank you for your entry in the contest and Good Luck.
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Soooo bookmarking this one! This was def my top fav of you, that i've read thus far! awesome!!! you wrote a biographical poem about me! lol...jk! no, really, you are so damn gifted w/finding the perfect workds, that are never forced, but just always perfect for the tone!
You are classic!
sis
Rianna
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yuck!
This is so good that’s it’s gross! The rhyme and meter are perfect, I love the couplet at the end. It all leads to an image that is really raunchy, as bad as the picture.
Love,
Amera
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