Have you ever
had one of those days
when everything turns out for
the worst?
And nothing seems to be o.k?
Were you ask for help, and people just don't want to listen?
Have you ever
had one of those days
were no one seems to care,
about you anymore?
And everything is wrong?
Were you ask for company, and all you get is a dark room?
Have you ever
had one of those days
were you get bothered
by every little thing?
And no one talks anymore?
Were you beg for forgivness, and all you get is shame?
Have you ever
had one of those days
when you reach out for a hand,
and no one is reaching back?
And no one sees you?
Were you pray for something, and nothing but hate is given?
Have you ever?
Have you EVER
felt so alone
that you stare at the ceiling
at night
talking to your self, because no one wants to hear you?
Have you ever?
Have you EVER
been so alone
you walk to places, were you loved before
at night
wishing that someone, she, would accompany you?
Have you ever?
Have you EVER
cried all alone
sitting at the window sill,
at night
begging to just start all over, begin again?
Have you ever?
Have you ever?
Have you ever?
If you have
then you know what it's like for me
every single god damn day...
A contest entry
- prewrite conest by serenity silvermoon.
1500 points, ended June 12, 429 entries
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I wish I could say no, but...yes. I can relate to this write so much, and you have penned out the feelings beautifully. I can't say I know exactly how you feel right now, because no one really knows how another person feels...but I just wanted to let you know that I think everyone can relate to this, it's very powerful. Keep up the awesome work and (I'm sure you've heard this a thousand times and it makes no difference by now) I'm always here to talk.
Madison. -
wow! yes I have to agree that this is a wonderful poem. Almost every single line tells of my story. How lonely I feel and those times when there is trully no one there. Atleast I can visit this poem again and seek comfort.
Thanx for the great write.
I shall add it to my favourites.
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powerful
wow. I don't think I have ever read anything as powerful as this since last year. Truthfully- and believe me I am not exaggerating.
This reminded me of welcome to my life by simple plan. But yours was definitely better- I loved how you captured every lonely feeling and comepressed them into such an amazing piece.
There is so much depth and the last verse just really hit hard. Because I was nodding all the way with every stanza and BAM! the last stanza was like a punch in the stomach.
I loved everything about this piece. If I could, I would applaud this piece a hundred times. I have never read anything as spectacular as this before. Awesome writing!
Love
Lonely Shouts
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Wow.. I hope that its not like that every day... but writing sure helps us to get those feelings out... We have all felt hopeless and lost and beleive me I am no exception I have had uncontrollable tears without knowing why for months.... but there is a light at the end of the tunnel you just need to find where it is for you.
As for the poem itself the rephrase was great it almost brought it as if it were a song.... If you are musical tr puting it to music... you might have to tweak it for that ...
Well have a great day! -
Deep and written with passion
I have been there. I have had many days [and nights] like that. Your piece is heartfelt and deep. Also quite dark. It is written with honesty. I feel for you.
Wayne
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Very heartfelt
Very emotional...
I can say I relate to most of this...But I've never been completely alone..Nor Have I ever prayer and gotten only hate in return.... I haven't always gotten answers when I wanted them or help when I thought I really needed it...But never hate...
Great write, though!
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Such a heart felt poem, you poured your emotions out on this page, and I think we all have felt this one time or another in our life.... I know I sure have and its not nice...... dont give up on every single day one day it may just be a very good day!
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This is a beautiful write indeed, yet so very sad. I had days like that which seemed like forever, 'till I got back the one I loved. Yet, some things seem to never go right, and I still have one of those days. I hope things change for you. Great write again as well.
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every single day? Even since I came back?
hmmm?
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