When I heard the rain tapping on my
window this morning
A sense of sexual urgency came over me
I needed you here
The thought of you kissing me
your hands caressing my body
fingertips circling my breasts
gentle nibbling here and there
feeling your breath so hot
sweet sacred honey starting to flow
I needed you here
I call you
You say you will be right there
The anticipation only heightens my desire
It isn’t long before my lustful eyes
meet yours, it seemed like hours
Your skin soft and slippery
with the hint of sweat
Heated tongues meeting in the midst
of hot and quickening breath
Greedily we drink the wine of our lusts
Our clothes tossed into heaps
the floor becoming our stage
You enter gently but confidently
kissing me as I am filled with you
I gasp, breaking the kiss
Our slow rhythm giving way
to urgent and demanding thrusts
throwing me into ecstasy
leaving me screaming and soaked
The taste of you hot between my lips
You cry for mercy as my teeth meets your skin
growling my name from the back of your throat
We are drenched in the drippings of our mutual desire
You take my face between your hands
Looking deep within my being
You tell me
“I needed to be here”
Author notes
I need you here.....
In a list
A contest entry
- *~ Got a Pre-Write? ~* by Desire.
525 points, ended November 30, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank You!
Thank You for Your entry: Rain's Need
Wonderful images You have weaved to bring the reader within emotions of need and allowed
to taste the sweetness
from Your words spoken.
Loved the last lines:
You take my face between your hands
Looking deep within my being
You tell me
"I needed to be here"
Magnificent verse You have penned~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Judging will be done shortly
Many blessings to You in our Group contest
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Well
I can honestly say...Gee I wish I was the one you called...being this steamy delight is so entranced in my mind...and Im now feeling the urge overwhelm me... gee wizz I miss all the fun...and sex too...
Mal
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I am not much of an "erotic" poem reader as they are difficult to write and...sometimes quite difficult to read...ha! You did not only a tasteful job on this but made it carry a sense of sincerity and energy of two intense lovers. Bravo to you on this write, I know, a difficult task
~Tia
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wow i think ur gonna ahve to take a cold shower all these erotic poems lol well done love this is excellent xxxx
laura xxxxxxx -
Entracingly sensual
If there was a word better than erotic i would have used it to describe this piece. Like the refrain
"I needed you here"
This is'nt flattery, you really all the right notes. Now i almost wish i did'nt have such an overactive imagination
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WOW
Smoking hot piece Noreen. I too love the rain...thunderstorms really get me cranked up Love this erotic & steamy & sensual write. Excuse me while I go get a cool shower now...
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HOT! HOT! HOT!
Noreen
Phewwwwwwww! You sent some heat flying off these pages. I love this erotic write. Sensual and naughty and you know I love to write naughty
Rain is a perfect setting for romance and craving the desires of another. I love the rain
i love the entire poem, but I'll choose this verse as one of my favs cause it set the poem ablaze,
" You enter gently but confidently
kissing me as I am filled with you
I gasp, breaking the kiss
Our slow rhythm giving way
to urgent and demanding thrusts
throwing me into ecstasy
leaving me screaming and soaked"
Need a Ice Cold Drink Now!
Take care
Bo
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Oh love how you opened with the line I needed you here and then his closing line. " I needed to be here" OK going to look for my Allure Thesaurus, words have escaped me as FF screams in the background.. HOT HOT WOMAN!
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Sensuously delicate
Sensuous poem written so delicately. It is indeed a wonderful piece of work. I have never read such a beautiful poem in the recent times. Keep your imagination flying Great work. Keep writing such beautiful poems. I would be happy, if you could spare little time to visit my poems to stamp your views
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love the ending. good stuff. dare i say enjoyed the read.
blu
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Superb
Very, um how do we say...HOT!
The words flow burn into your mind
the moments depicted..Great write
Peace/Mia
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WowwW hot write
Think it could have been titled, I needed to be here. Yes, i too would have enjoyed that session. a treat of ecstacy`s delight.
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Wow
You made that so vividly clear. Whew, I think somebody turned up the heat... (Ha-Ha) Very sensual write and only a talented poetess could pull off...
Thanks for sharing it with me...
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Great title..lol
this is really a good write...even I, peeking through cracks in my fingers, can see, your ability to pen sensuality is bar none duh best! -
MERCY! Well.. I was starting to doze off but I read this and I am awake now. nice
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