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Surgeon of love

She's not the typical lady;
She's going to cut open and analyze the heart.
She's eviscerated the body
and tore out the organs.
She's a naughty little vixen,
avenging the wrong doings of
men that have wronged her.
Hell hath no fury...
She says,
As she sips the fancy red wine.
She's a vampire in disguise.
ready to dine on the humanity
of ones who aren't suspecting.
With a sly smile on her face,
She's the surgeon of love.

Author notes

So, I think I broke my writers block...and I'm enjoying it. But this one might not be finished.

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  • darell
    August 14, 2007

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    Damn!

    I must be fucking crazy because
    I found that so freaking sexy.
    My blood was boiling and I could
    see myself eating you up like a
    hungry dog. Lapping your luscious
    jewels like it was no tomorrow.


  • individuality gold member
    May 1, 2007

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    so if she calls here do i call her doctor or miss as she slips her teeth in a good piece, ah vampires, laughing the night away like the dawn didn't matter.

  • Rajaram
    April 29, 2007

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    I love the way you have waged a war with the words and won at last. Great work hun. I am simply loving the movement in this poem. Great touch in the end. Keep writing such beautiful poems.


  • Xx Morbid Beauty xX
    April 17, 2007

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    wow

    this is just awesomely worded with such truth flowing thought every line.You have taken a great story and told a valuable lesson to all who read
    great work hun
    <3 krissy


  • Andy Stephenson
    April 14, 2007

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    It does seem that it could be expanded.

    So in order to keep a man's heart, she just cuts it out of him. Kind of like a heart transplant? Then what does she do? Well, I like this one.

    Andy


  • The Existentialist
    April 13, 2007
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    very vey nice


  • MotherMachineGunn
    April 13, 2007

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    I for one enjoyed the interpretation of the picture. Her as a vampyre... I like the idea of it all. Job well done and good luck in the contest.

    ~MotherMachineGunn~


  • naked roots
    April 13, 2007

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    chilling write!
    a surgeon of love huh? I think I would hate to run into her! Very vividly written! wishing you luck in the contest
    luv ya!!
    hugs!

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