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New Beginnings

My tear-stained soul
Can no longer be hidden
By glass smiles and false joy

Emotions spiraling
-Spinning-
Out of control
Lost in my own mind

See not the sunset
And forget the sunrise
To make it through another day

Jumbled thoughts
Incoherent statements
Fustration builds up inside
To erupt such negativity

Ironic fantasies
Dreams
Of a world far-off
Unattainable

To forget
Such sweet bliss
Erase my mind of the past

Let there be some closure
A permanent resolution
To end the hurt of my heart
And begin again

Author notes

I don't know. I just kind of wrote it. I'm trying to experiment with different words instead of the same old "Love. Sad sad sad"

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  • shysky
    April 17, 2007

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    A heart will forever hurt, over an imagined slight or perhaps one not quite so imagined. you captured some very deep emotions with this peice

    Thank you so much for entering my contest.
    I loved the read
    ~A Heart's Hope Lies With Belladonna~


  • LoveLikePoetry
    April 17, 2007

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    this was really good. i love the flow, and just everything. thanx for entering. *going in the finalist*


  • photay.poetry
    April 14, 2007

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    another great write. i also loved the line
    "glass smiles and false joy"
    i also likethe mood of the poem. even though you been broken, you really didnt give up. well kinda. you gave up your old life and started a new one. not a lot of people would do that. i thought that was great.
    keeep it up


  • Sokarjo
    April 14, 2007

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    What a fantastic write! I love it. "Glass smiles and false joy" I love that statement. Excellent work on this one. A fresh perception.


  • Comes to Cross
    April 13, 2007

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    Great Job. I loved this one! It was brilliant, I could see your sadness. The blue back round was a good help to feel it too. But the poem was excellent.

    C2+


  • gone4years
    April 13, 2007

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    I love this

    This is truely amazing and brillant. I like it alot and is kinda along the lines of some of mine. I love to death this one!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I enjoy alot the line "
    See not the sunset
    And forget the sunrise
    To make it through another day"

    I find myself thinking this alot these days.
    not so much me, as becky but ya.
    she gets that way when she thinks.
    (the above paragraph is talking to me)

  • in-the-twilight
    April 12, 2007

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    I like it girlie! You're an amazing poet when you pour your heart into it! Great job my friend! Rock on! xoxo Meg

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