nameless
faceless
Little girl
Big girl
Doesn't really matter
because she isn't seen
stands next to the wall
not noticed
not seen
Invisible
She looks and listens
using her senses
Spotting details
no one else saw
She's the girl no one knew
The girl no one saw
She's in every school
in every work place
Invisible
Nameless
Faceless
A girl with no name
Author notes
Option # 3 I picked the title because it was something I could relate to
A contest entry
- Options, because everyone loves them. by AlternateCandidate.
430 points, ended April 15, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments
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I'm glad that you picked a topic that was personal to you, and I think that you incorporated the prompt well. However, I feel like most of your phrases are a bit too vague and have been used too many times before. I think the piece would be better if you expanded it, gave the girl more specific characteristics, and used some varied language.
Thank you so much for entering!
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