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With Eyes Closed

As I inhale, clove cigarette pressed to my mouth
I pretend

The candy on my lips
Is the sweetness of your kiss

The crackling of the spice
Is the electric sparkle you send down my spine

The smoke in my lungs
Is the intoxicating smell of your clothes

The fire, warm to the touch, is your loving hand

My fingers grasp the smooth black paper that is your skin

It is you that I am breathing in

Author notes

I breathe him in everything. This is a poor substitute. But a metaphor and a reminder nonetheless.

Is my passion perfect?

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  • Carved-In-Ankh
    April 16, 2007
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    submit to imprints

  • piccola silver member
    April 12, 2007

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    ummmmm this is a really romantic write. I like the soft sensuality of it. inhaling his essence. The feel of that is wonderful (sighs)


    • unsleepable
      April 12, 2007
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      I thank you for the compliments, and the first comment I have gotten on a poem in months.

      <3