I hate what you are.
Every part of your superficial freakshow
life is a lie.
What turned you from a normal human
into this monster that feeds off of
the self-demise of others?
What have I done to get your hate?
What have I changed in myself to
receive the wrath of your pathetic pettiness?
I try to find what's left
of how we used to be,
then i realize that it's no good.
When did you make my life so horrible?
Why do you mock me so much?
How come your in my face?
How come mirrors are our worst enenmies?
Author notes
Free verse
A contest entry
- Anything. by Andii.
600 points, ended September 15, 2007, 48 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PEERING INTO YOUR MIRROR (no rules) by Heavens Child.
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I really liked most of this. I felt towards the end you became a little careless in how you worded the poem, but the first half of the poem the strength was powerful and poignant and the idea behind this piece was something all of us battle with and I think, for the most part, you represented it well.
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Contemporary and interesting.
Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN -
I like the metaphor of the mirror for this write since the poem is really like a form of dialogue in rhetorical questions. It's clever b/c it's like demanding answers from yourself that the mirror can't answer but we use it as a tool to evaluate and reflect on ourselves. Very deep. But i think it could be improved still.
thanks for your entry but i need name in author notes to judge your poem.
~elizabeth~ -
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I put my AP name in the author's box. I'm glad you liked it!
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I think everyone has a part of themselves that they don't like, that they wish they could change. But we are all works in progress, none of us are perfect. But acknowledgement of a problem is half the battle. I love the rawness and the complete honesty of this piece. Not many have the ability to be that honest, which leads me to believe you probably judge yourself quickly as well. Thank you for the entry in my contest.
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Wow. I enjoyed this so much! Very powerful, but so true for so many people out there! Amazing job!
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Hehehe, I so came up with that title. Aren't I so cool like that, yo? lol. J/K. Anyways, it's a really good poem and it was fun watching you type it...
Loves,
~Raine~ -
it was good
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