Blowing bubbles in the breeze,
Watchful winds whisk them to trees.
Glimmer… glisten… going high,
Sparkling spheres soar to the sky.
Popping… popping… pours the rain.
Soap suds fall on earth’s domain,
Forming foam of bubble’s glee.
Author notes
option 10: bubbles
Form: Rhyming Alliterisen
Alliterisen is a form created by Udit Bhatia(aka The Risen Sun)
Rhyming Alliterisen consists of 7 lines,
with 7 syllables each, and has one
alliteration in every line. The rhyme
scheme as follows: aabbccd.
A contest entry
- Short Lived Short Form #20 by Samplette.
425 points, ended April 14, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options, but a different kind! by Erin200.
424 points, ended July 16, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Simplicity by Flossy.
600 points, ended July 1, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excellent form and expression! Congratulations on your trifecta!
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thank you so very much.
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I like your style. Your poem actually feels kind of bubbly. Thank you for entering my contest.
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thank you so much. i love bubbles and i'm glad you enjoyed this one. thanks for hosting and for the silver.
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wowie
this is skill incarnate!! That was so dang awesome! lovely lovely lovely...i like bubbles...lol...awesome poem and awesome imagery, and amazing alliteration!
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you are always way too nice... thanks, though... i really do appreciate the boost!
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great job and im glad you spent so much time and effort into this. great job you're going to the finalists.
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thank you... i just noticed the contest ended, but can't find it in my messages anywhere. thanks for the bronze and for hosting!
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You put so much work into this - congrats on the gold!
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Your comment is what alerted me that the contest had finished! Thank you for the coment and for being the bearer of the results!
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A delightful read and wonderfully written Rhyming Alliterisen. Very nicely done. Thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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hehe, yay! i love bubbles! =) very nice poem! makes me wish i was back in preskool again so i could blow bubbles and get a grade for it, hehe
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this amde me feel really happy. like i was floating in the air or something. ok, that was stupid. i'll shut up great poem though!
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no, it sort of does give that feeling...as though you can feel the bubble's glee along with the bubble...thanks so much for your comment!
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7's this time
sweet!! 7 is MUCH better then 8... lol.. and i am going to destroy this quick comment thing that gets in why way when i try to read your poems............... seriously...
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ha! good luck doing that! You must be speed reading!
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Take me away Calgon! lol This is a nifty little form. Very nice job and enjoyable read. Best to you, ♥ Belle
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Nice Nice Nice Nice
OH I just LOVE bubbles. Beautiful beautiful bubbles. Well done with this form. I have never tried one but I think I will have to. Just delightful. LOVED This to pieces. "POP"
~Pamela 
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Hey...loved the comment until you burst my bubble!
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going nowhere
I just couldn't help myself. He he he "I win!"
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you are too funny...I'll get you back....hmmm. this should be fun...
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aww, that was so cute and playful! it was innocent and i think that was the beauty of this poem. very interesting and creative subject matter. i love the rhyme too.
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