King of Hearts, Queen of Clubs,
Jack of Diamonds
Nine of Hearts, 4 of Spades;
Drop the 4 for the four, hoping for a ten.
3 of Hearts, Hand is Lost
What's left, King High.
(Suicide King)
Author notes
I did a series of poems like this and somehow, no matter how random the hands seem to come out, I could always make a connection to an aspect of my life. Let me know if you can too.
A contest entry
- Short Lived Short Form #20 by Samplette.
425 points, ended April 14, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-write Party 3 by DancingRed.
300 points, ended September 26, 2007, 14 entries
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what do you think of the idea?
Comments
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Initial reaction - 7
Poetic devices - 23
Individuality/creativity - 14
Vocabulary - 7
Emotional engagement - 7
Layout/organisation - 5
Spelling/grammar/punctuation - 5
Background/font - 5
Overall impact - 7
Total score - 80
This piece worked quite well. I take it as a comment about gambling, and it's very powerful if we're following that vein. Could have used more poetic devices, I feel; the beginning is more of a list.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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Very interesting piece of poetry. Thank you for entering the contest. I enjoyed the read. Nice write.
Sam
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