Driving home in the dark before dawn,
Wipers swishing on the misted screen:
Headlights glaring from the early shift
On their hectic way to the airport.
There's an empty feeling where you've been
And tender spots from eager caresses
As euphoria fades, here comes the sadness:
Hanging over from another good time.
No point sleeping now, it's too late,
Showering kickstarts another dull day:
Leading to a night alone and unwarmed
On my solitary way of existence.
There's an empty feeling where you were
Newly clean from the laughing and loving
But euphoria fades and I take on your sadness:
Hanging over from another good time.
A contest entry
- Titles For Everyone!!! by AllYoullNeverHave.
450 points, ended April 13, 2007, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your best prewrite EVER! by love tank x.
650 points, ended May 1, 2007, 43 entries
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Good poem
I like your title, and the poem evokes strong images and feelings, i guess we are all alone in reality but sometimes we can be distracted from this fact
regards
perdix
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geez this is so sad...
you've hit the 'afterwards' blues spot on. i can see why this has won gold... well deserving
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like it
Very lyricy poem, good imagery and feel very cool ... chin up
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Wow! Nice job. I like it. The sadness of just getting home from a wonderful time with a lover or friend... That's what it seems to me. Very well done. Good job. Thanks for entering. Good luck!
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Driving home in the dark before dawn,
What a perfect line to start a poem. It either immediately ties your poem to the reader from experience or sets their minds spinning, why?
Well written.
John
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