Forgive me my love
I cannot go with you
I love you with all my earthly passions
in a realm that is way beyond my understanding
Bound with a grip that constricts with every
step I take closer to your essence
Your love is overpowering
One I have never known before
Our love exists further
than the eyes can see
Deeper than the soul can feel
In its continuance, we will
destroy all that we have been
I cannot exist in your world
And surely, you cannot in mine
Our love will illuminate the sky
and in its brilliance we will be
eternally joined in our forbidden love
In a list
A contest entry
- Pic Inspired 2. by Poetic Aphrodite.
300 points, ended April 14, 2007, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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SO HEART BREAKING
First let me say congrats on the silver but I thought it should have been gold
This is such a touching piece my sister, forbidden love yet so deep and real. Sad to be unfulfilled and separated by fate. EXCELLENT job~
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Indeed
You should have won...Outstanding job, well penned verses here. I am so glad I got the chance to read this. -
i can see why this recieved the silver trophy... well done on a beautiful piece showing an ethereal love
cheers
Jen
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this is something else you ahve reached further that poetic perfection well done and good luck in the contest not that you'll need it ofcourse xxx
laura xxx -
Wow, this is simply beautiful!
I love the emotions that run throughout this.
Well done and good luck to you in the contest
my friend!
Jeremy0826 -
WOW!
Your choice of words painted the image to perfection! I love the thoughts and imagination you expresed to show your feeling of the image.
Last verse is stunning!
" I cannot exist in your world
And surely, you cannot in mine
Our love will illuminate the sky
and in its brilliance we will be
eternally joined in our forbidden love"
Good luck in the contest!
Take care
Bo
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WOW!
this gave me the chills as i finished reading it. wow! that is about all i can say. that and good luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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Thankyou for your beautiful entry, Bella
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This is wonderful Noreen, it's beautiful and heart breaking, time will pass and the two souls will be together forever...My favorite lines..well the whole last stanza
I cannot exist in your world
And surely, you cannot in mine
Our love will illuminate the sky
and in its brilliance we will be
eternally joined in our forbidden love
These words bring the whole poem home, and bought tears to my eyes....spendid
Cathy
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Good write woman....very tender....forbidden love....hmmmm....
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Wow! I love it. If we can't exist.. we will exist regardless together.. in forbidden ways. Your writes are so strong and deep. Thanks for sharing this. Good luck in the contest.
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Sweet and touching.
Loved this forbidden love, as many loves are. the flow was lovely tothe end. Thank you
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Words cannot express my deep feelings on this subject. I can only look deeply into your avatar's eyes and nod. Sad, really... we had such a thing going with that kiss... if only I had seen it... Three bunnies for this!
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