Just as this downpour continues, trapped sentiments wage battle inside this crumbling structure called a heart however which grievances came, life still somehow presented itself just as the falling tears from Sanctuary's doors.
Parts of me pondered--wandered tirelessly seeking for an answer as to why this figurative body could never allow completion; yet nothingness was be-still within- leaving only mere breadcrumbs to travel back home to.
Encountered for the second time, my soul echoed wanting something...but what?
I knew what it was, but feared what it could be foreseen as.
Shallow puddles encroach looking for another minute way out never truly realizing that the very door of which was the creator, closed and locked itself with an unfathomed key; distinguished vibrations only heighten--weighed down
the wooden trails.
These feelings...what are they?
Walking closer to every nearby home, the lights of guidance was either turned off, or simply busted due to facts of what was to become once more. Thereafter,
wisps of sighs breezed inside rethinking this cumbersome emotion...
So why is it that I can cry in public on the concrete paved avenue or boulevard streets?
Am I to forever walk alone?
Author notes
CONFESSIONAL POETRY
Refers to a type of narrative and lyric verse which deals with the facts and intimate mental and physical experiences of the poet's own life. In confessional poetry, the speaker often describes his confused chaotic state, which becomes a metaphor for the state of the world around him.
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"...distinguished vibrations only heighten--weighed down the wooden trails." Pure Magic!!!!!!!!!!!
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oh, this reminds me of my boyfriend.lol! He often feels like this..always thinking hes so alone.
well anyways i loved the write!
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Could be called a rant in a way that it could have gone on and on, with thoughts, feelings, emotions of how you felt at the time of writing this - personal, passionate. Guess some of my poetry could be classes as confessional as well - is it also a method of healing, of releasing those thoughts that hold us back, tie us down or freeing ourselves from ourselves?
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When you get down to the very basis of confessional poetry, that is all what it is --that release we've held back for so long
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Wipes my tears away. The ending was so very powerful I could see it in my mind. This was very emotional. You did a wonderful job in this write.
Kari
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dont cry please dont ive done my month of crying and dont need anymore
and thank you
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Awww
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!!
My precious daughter:
How wonderfully written this piece is, I am always in Awe when I read your writings, for they are intense, deep and most of all heartfelt; the reader can actually feel how the poet -writer- felt at the time of the write.
This was truly an outstanding piece that I would read over and over again..... My hat is off to you!!!!!
Be blessed always with love, light and the flow of beauty through words follow you trough life to share with those that truly appreciate such beauty.
I love you always,
Mami
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you know words can best be expressed from the heart, that is what i love about these confession poems of yous, keep it flowing
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thank you
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I am not sure if I should comment on the poem or the message. One would show my interest, respect and praise for your poetic gifts, this poems structure and the quality but that would be aloof and disconnected compared to the message that has been presented here. This message begs a more intimate, concerned response and I feel I would have ignored the message and failed both you and GOD if I do not answer this cry for help.
It saddens me to see you in such pain and feeling this lost. It angers me too because I know it is unneccesary and a trick of the enemy designed to keep you in bondage.
You have never been, nor will you ever be alone. GOD is actively pursuing a relationship with you. Don't let the enemy and his agents keep you from the wonderful gift of GOD's love.
Our past can be either a stepping stone or an anchor. There are many influences but ultimately the decision is ours to make. Remember the story of the prodigal son. GOD has sooooo much joy in store for you. Come home.
One love,
John
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Hi Virginia
Wow, this is really written in a deep and emotional way. I like the strength of your words and the imagery of being trapped with no where to turn. Not a comfortable emotional state, but it is well written.
I have found for me getting things out are a good start. Then I go quietly inside through meditation and let the darkness out. I am learning to love myself as you should for the wonderful person you are, and we will look to no one for validation of our being.
Sorry, got carried away, but strong poems do that to me.
Well expressed B,
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Hi Virginia
Wow, this is really written in a deep and emotional way. I like the strength of your words and the imagery of being trapped with no where to turn. Not a comfortable emotional state, but it is well written.
I have found for me getting things out are a good start. Then I go quietly inside through meditation and let the darkness out. I am learning to love myself as you should for the wonderful person you are, and we will look to no one for validation of our being.
Sorry, got carried away, but strong poems do that to me.
Well expressed B,
Buddy
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thank you
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being that this is "confessional poetry" and thereby applies to author , it is not so far removed from what all might experience and question and only lack the words to put it down . For a confused , chaotic state of mind seems to be the norm for many of us, and I do wonder if it is really meant for us to have the answers.
Quite a literate write here and it will take some time to mull over,
much love
reenie
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this is something i can so relate to. your feelings are very apparent in this write. thank you for showing me i am not alone in these type of feelings. viyanna rosemarie
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I've got more writes like this in my Confession list and thank you
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