Drip,Drip
The blood falls on the floor.
Drip,Drip
The girl was no more.
Her father murdered her
so the AIDS wouldn't do it.
Drip,Drip
a million people have
died of Aids already.
Drip,Drip........
Author notes
use Protection so Aids won't affect you. helps those who cant help you.
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Wow. This is Amazingly beautiful.Very unique. Short and sweet. <333
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I liked the originality of the idea,
However I felt the drip, drip was rather random fitting (whether it went with the topic or not,) and overall the idea was kind of scattered?
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hmm it was generally honest, and touched on a subject that not many wish to talk about. I enjoyed the simple yet tragic tone...powerful
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awww this was a really sad poem..i enjoyed reading this..but it is so sad as to how many children die from AIDS every year it is really unfair keep writting
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Effective and moving; such a sad & terrible topic to write about.
Only one suggestion & that's about the colours - red font on a blue background is doing funny things to my eyes!
Thanks for entering this powerful poem.
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Wow... powerful words pact into this short write. It's a bit disturbing to think that a father would kill his own child, even if she has a fatal disease. Good write.
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Makes me question was her father in the right to kill his daughter. Or should he just let the disease ravage her body? Tough desition.
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Good write...short, but says a lot. It's like a little girl talking in the corner in a freakily calm voice. The voice which speaks only morbid things, but very true things.
You text is kinda ard to read on this background. They're practically the same color.
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Its got a big hit for something so small. People always feel it can't effect me. It only effects the young, gay, those that sleep around, or that are whores, and so on with reasons. But it can effect anyone for any reason. I don't feel a parent should ever kill a child for any reason though I understand why he did it. We need to realize that we can stop this diesese without acure but we need to protect ourselves and others.
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Wow
Such a big impact in so little words. People are too naive, always saying "It'll never happen to me" and then it does. I think you're sending out a great message here to everyone and this kind of thing should be broadcasted everywhere. And because you used such a relationship (instead of just bf/gf, you used father/daughter), it really hits home with a hard punch. Well done.
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Very powerful and very true. It it saddens me that it is still an issue. There are far too many people that have "That can't/won't happen to me" syndrome and they do not protect themselves. The education is out there. Well done.
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The sad part about this is that it is that there is tryuth in every word. It saddens me that in this day and age that there is a need to highlight such an issue. Aids is probably one of the worlds biggest killers yet there is still so much ignorance surrounding it. This is spine chilling piece highlighting an issue we should be aware of all over the world.
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you would figure people would understand how to prevent AIDS
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Your text is hard to read with this background.
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sad
it's to true thats the sad part, way to true. One of the things they can't sean to cure. -
Oh my... This poem together with that background makes me want to cry...
The poem is short but really makes you think... Sometimes the simple things, like this poem, havethe ghreatest impact on people...
Thank you for sharing this!
Keep up the excellent work!
Annie 
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awwww this was a very moving piece,,, i really enjoyed reading this for the most part it was very sad tho ... anyways yet again another fantastic write keep it up
krissy -
A very disturbing write.
Well done
Raker -
The words and the background picture was just a heart wecking work. I really appreciate your time for writing this work and sharing it with all of us here.
Take care;
Pretty.
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